too fast mate,the story develop too fast,just hope you could slow down the pace of the story,in just 3 chapter he got to admiral strength, it's too fastt

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You are writing a nice book as a fellow author I can tell that your story has very good potential keep writing and we will be always waiting for new releases

​Captain Usopp's was killed on the way to Laugh Tale and see his sweetest dream in the underworld, lol. Pitiful parody of Path to Power. So boooooooring.

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I think this story has a lot of potential. Key points to look out for: 1) use of dialogue, think you could Make use of more dialogue. the entire story is written in Lincolns thoughts with sparse use of dialogue. 2) character development: The story is too focused on Physical development and has ignored much of lincolns mental development 3) world sEtting: the entire transition to rocks Pirates, the worlD government, strength levels are not too clear Even with the auxiliary chapter 4) Story pace: reading just the first few chapters, it Already the gives the feeling that the story will end in 10-15 chapters max. You want to make sure you have a modest goal in terms of how long this fanfic will be and pace yourself to achieve that goal

Interesting story but poorly written... The writing style and the bad grammar make it somewhat hard to have fun reading this. With an editor this might become a rather good story.

Bro this is my favourite, i liked the powel scale in the one piece verse of this fic its amazing. ive read too many ”cliche” one piece fanfictions but this one blew my mind with all the suprises i shed a couple tears with xebec and the duo

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