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Cloki
ClokiLv13yr
2021-04-23 09:20

Pretty good so far! Story was conveyed well, world-building is exceptional, grammar is pretty good, I like where it's going! I'll read on later when I have more time

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Hello guys! Author here for a review of my book. 1. Point of View The story flows in a third person pov. This is to give details on other matters which the characters themselves may not know as of the moment. 2. Characters a. Main Character - he is a genius. This is a requirement for the Writing Prompt I joined. However, this does not mean that he is without flaw because that would make him omnipotent and, I don't want that. Some mistakes will be done by him but, I'll make it sure that these things are reasonable. b. Female Counterpart - This won't be a useless Sakura that would drag the main character down! In fact, on instances where the main character would be in a pinch, she would definitely come to his aide. I'm still thinking on what personality I'll give her and if I don't edit this part, it means that I want you to read it for yourself. c. Villain - Sorry I can't spoil it. I may just ruin the whole mood of the story if I do lol. 3. Pacing The story would progress slowly BUT THERE'S A REASON FOR THIS! I need to build up the proper emotions as things go along. I noticed that, if I try to speed things up too much, the events become shallow and bland and I don't want that. I want you to immerse yourself in the story as if everything was actually happening with you in it. :)) 4. Mistakes Of course there'd be a lot of mistakes lol. That's why I'll be counting on you guys to voice out your opinions on whatever you see on the story. I'll be sure to put them all into consideration as the story progresses. 5. THANK YOU FOR READING MY WOOOOORK!

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