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SomethingElse1
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2021-11-27 14:17

This had potentially to be a pretty interesting novel with a unique idea. Unfortunately, it's been completely ruined by poor grammar, poor dialogue and poor everything, only thing good was the concept. First of all, this author has attempted to copy dialogue from all the chinese novels out there. They've failed badly; it's clear the author has never even had a proper conversation with a fellow human being. The grammar is awful, the interactions are just awkward and they try so hard to sound profound but the author doesn't know what they're typing so it just sounds stupid. The author has tried to make the MC talk like how an elder in let's say a cultivation novel talks, sounding profound and all except it doesn't here, it just sounds stupid because it makes no sense and it's filled with bad grammar. Even without the grammar issues, the phrases don't flow well anyways so it doesn't matter. It's obvious the author spent a bit of time looking over the first chapter and then started speedrunning through the rest without proofreading or editing.

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SomethingElse1
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Literally only reason this so many stars is because of a bot named spirithunter or w/e spamming 5 stars on here for months.

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I made a story recently called "The First Demon Diablo" so if you're interested then please check it out and if you think it’s worth your time then leave a review with pros and cons of the novel as well as constructive criticism😁

SomethingElse1:Literally only reason this so many stars is because of a bot named spirithunter or w/e spamming 5 stars on here for months.
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