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ImaginationGalaxy
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2021-08-21 11:57

The story started off good, but around chapter 30 or so things started to get a bit annoying. The MC doesnt show any kind of wisdom that would match a 100 year old man who raised children and grandchildren. At around chapter 38-43 things just became so much worse. MC makes a pill that is like viagra on steroids, and is somehow completely oblivious to others reactions to it, and is exceedingly vague whenever talking about it to others. Having characters taking a pill, which they expect to strengthen them, only for it to be an extreme aphrodisiac is not my kind of humor at all. I am pretty sure that kind of stuff is illegal to an insane degree in many places because of how cruel and harmful it is, but in the story its supposed to be funny.

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