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Carlos_Balbizan
Carlos_BalbizanLv13yr
2021-10-31 11:48

It starts with the cliché of someone hurting him and he can't do anything... are you dirty? Can such a wound be considered an attempted murder, and the police or the government do nothing? says he barely has money when he could have sued both the other guy's master and the one who attacked him. and then the cliché of playing the game without knowing what to do that his sister gave him starts, I've read many with the same script (literally the same) congratulations for your creativity

The Adventurer System

Jigx
3.9
298 Chs

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Carlos_Balbizan
Carlos_BalbizanLv1

the "guide" just mentioned the rarity of having zexel and he wanted to ask why he has 2? mc has negative iq. is it a muscle brain?, not to mention how he was made paraplegic, when he took the punch and ran out of air, the referee should have intervened... was he on his side? and the author writes how it took a while for him to deliver the second blow. not to mention this writing not too bad, but as confusing as MTL... it's just another novel to fill the site's quota probably.

3yr
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Jigx
JigxAuthor

Nape, it's affecting his spinal cord. It stops sending the message to his brain. but, thankz

3yr
DaoistHyWeOM
DaoistHyWeOMLv1

Thing is the way you wrote it makes it seem like the injury was towards the upper spine , likely at the neck region. As far as the MC works he is a paraplegic But typically Neck injuries if bad enough Will cause quadrapalegic as in no feeling or movement from the neck down. Generally would have to be lower back damage for just paralyzed waist down

Jigx:Nape, it's affecting his spinal cord. It stops sending the message to his brain. but, thankz
3yr
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I'd like how the story goes on, the character development and the world building, and it always made me excited what will happen next. Thanks Author keep it up! we are always here your reader to support you!!!!! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Jigx
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Hi, I'm the author of the adventurer system! Also, this is a shameless review. first of all, I don't have much vocabulary so some words are repeated, but I guarantee you that I already made each arc of the story. I admitted that there are some grammatical issues, but don't blame me English is not my native language hahaha! I will try to fix it as soon as possible. About Drake? All question has the answer, so stay tuned. To the readers, read my work I hope you enjoy it, I'm really glad this is the reason why I keep writing, thank you!

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ling_baobao
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This is the first time I've read this type of novel. Ans I'm telling y'all, give this book a try. It won't disappoint you. I love the male lead, he never quits.

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David_Neilsen
David_NeilsenLv1

This story is hurt by poor grammar. There is a kernal of something interesting underneath, but it is difficult to get at it. The character seems very one-dimensional, so we're not really rooting for him so much as just sitting back and watching.

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CraftyCat
CraftyCatLv5

First of all, I am not a pro at making reviews 2nd It's my opinion and what I think about it. 3rd I don't care if anyone will be offended by this. and 4th I read up to chapter 9 The story has good potential but grammar has problems, the systems (power level, the name color) is not good (maybe gets better later), plot armor is thick, I think the MC is dumb and contradicts himself. Over all good but the mc to cliche for me and the grammar and systems need polishing.

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Bulgron
BulgronLv5

I read up to chapter 40 and what I can say is that there are very absurd elements in this novel. The event that leaves Mc paraplegic can easily be described as an assassination attempt and the consequences for the villain who did it are not discussed later. The Mc doesn't know about the game's existence when he gets his virtual helmet, and the sister who has taken care of him for 4 years (who is also a player) is another item without explanation. The possibility of bringing something from the game to the real world (and the Mc not knowing the game) leaves me perplexed. The Mc is unable to join the game for 2 days to escape problems and his not doing ANY research on the rules of the game during this period is proof of his foolishness. I'm honestly going to drop this novel because this level of nonsense is too big for me. Translated by GT

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Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

I am very pleased to see such an amazing novel! It was so good that I didn't know that I have already read a few chapters! The characters were very lifelike and realistic. With emotions to let us see their character. The plot was steadily building up and it was nice! The worldbuilding was vast and detailed. I like how you explain the nooks and crannies in your craft. Overall, It was easy to get lost in your novel as it was very immersive! I will wait for your work to reach a million views and that will be pleasing to the eyes! Kudos and good luck! Peace ✌️

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Time_Zekrom_4361
Time_Zekrom_4361Lv11

You need to improve your grammar as it really ruins the story. The character is way too open with his abilities and your transitions aren't the smoothest. The story is alright but you should probably lay out more information about the current world the MC lives in.

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