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Ray77der
Ray77derLv124yr
2021-02-25 15:01

It was a good story. I liked the way the story was progressing. But then the protagonist just went ahead and messed with the canon. Why would he do that? He is in a new world , while barely knowing anything and having almost no power. There are loads of people who suffer injustice all the time, everywhere. Why is he putting himself in danger for people he knows nothing about? That a actually erased every interest I had in this story.

Land of Magic

Vincinia
4.0
47 Chs

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DaoistyQNGiX
DaoistyQNGiXLv14

Thanks for the heads up! Checked the titles of some chapters and know what you’re talking about so thank you!

4yr
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Insane_Pumpkin
Insane_PumpkinLv11

I think you didn't read the few last chapters, with his power up it would he would be ok when it comes to power, also this kind of fanfiction is so much better then the kind where you just read the original plot with additional person that is the MC but as his presence don't change anything then he is just a side character in the end... It would be almost the same if someone wrote the original story from ron perspective, it would be a fanfic but what new would it bring?

4yr
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Vincinia
VinciniaAuthor

Thanks^^ thats exactly what I am thinking If we want to read of the normal story then we can read the original Why would I write something only to add a side character and live the normal timeline like it should be, because its easier. Hell no, yes its nice that we know what will come but that also makes it boring. If i had the chance to live inside this world and change it why not do it and add some spice to it. What would bring me a live without adventuring, have some courage and if you die, then so be it. Better live a live full of adventures and on the edge then live a normal life.

Insane_Pumpkin:I think you didn't read the few last chapters, with his power up it would he would be ok when it comes to power, also this kind of fanfiction is so much better then the kind where you just read the original plot with additional person that is the MC but as his presence don't change anything then he is just a side character in the end... It would be almost the same if someone wrote the original story from ron perspective, it would be a fanfic but what new would it bring?
4yr
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Insane_Pumpkin
Insane_PumpkinLv11

Yeah i agree, though i would troll everyone in any way i could just for fun... Or try to become a legend like Harry in his Mr. Black persona I'm curious how many people read that one.

Vincinia:Thanks^^ thats exactly what I am thinking If we want to read of the normal story then we can read the original Why would I write something only to add a side character and live the normal timeline like it should be, because its easier. Hell no, yes its nice that we know what will come but that also makes it boring. If i had the chance to live inside this world and change it why not do it and add some spice to it. What would bring me a live without adventuring, have some courage and if you die, then so be it. Better live a live full of adventures and on the edge then live a normal life.
4yr
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Shadewind
ShadewindLv6

Harem....?

Vincinia:Thanks^^ thats exactly what I am thinking If we want to read of the normal story then we can read the original Why would I write something only to add a side character and live the normal timeline like it should be, because its easier. Hell no, yes its nice that we know what will come but that also makes it boring. If i had the chance to live inside this world and change it why not do it and add some spice to it. What would bring me a live without adventuring, have some courage and if you die, then so be it. Better live a live full of adventures and on the edge then live a normal life.
4yr
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Zan_M
Zan_MLv3

really good and with potential, without stupid harem and gradual progress, continue with the story I'm loving it, I hope a well developed novel, keep up the good work

4yr

Hit1903
Hit1903Lv4

While the plot is good enough, you really need to work on the grammar. I could barely understand it. peace. ,..,.........,..................

4yr
BobT
BobTLv2

I stopped reading after it interfered with the original plot. I honestly expected more when in the description it mentioned not following the protagonists. I was expecting him to explore more of the world of HP with the plot of the books as secondary and no longer interfering to change the plot. It got off to a good start and looks promising, but it's not what I was looking to read at the moment.

3yr
Phoenix1998
Phoenix1998Lv6

nice. Plot is good. Excited for more. nice. Plot is good. Excited for more.nice. Plot is good. Excited for more.nice. Plot is good. Excited for more.

4yr
Feliximaout
FeliximaoutLv4

Another one of those storys where the MC somehow changes everything at the age of 3 and every aduld around just goes along with it. If you just need to shout for an houself to appear out of thin air ready to fulfill your every wish, then the Weaslys would have one too. They dont and they haven't. Just what you would expect from a story which needs 40+ chapters just to get to the point where he enters Hogwarts. Writing quality is decent so a good point there. I know there are people who enjoi these kind of storys, I am just not one of them.

2yr
Vincinia
VinciniaAuthor

Hello, I am so rude and give myself a nice 5-star review. Because why not :D I do hope that my novel is interesting and I am trying to go more in-depth about the way magic works and the background of the whole world. Just enjoy reading this and I wish everyone a nice day.

3yr
Insane_Pumpkin
Insane_PumpkinLv11

Good fanfic, a little slow story development at the start but it was faster later, now the only thing left is waiting for more chapters, i will be back to reread it when it reaches 25-30 chapters.

4yr
Phoenix1998
Phoenix1998Lv6

Really liked the story. interesting. More please. Really liked the story. interesting. More please.Really liked the story. interesting. More please.

4yr
MonsterCreator
MonsterCreatorLv4

I like the new theories or atleast not too much used theories in this story and you can do better but in my opinion this novel is in the best 10% of HP fanfics keep up

4yr
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