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2021-08-01 03:34

Reviewing at around chapter 275: I have conflicted feeling about this. the beginning was not too good in my opinion because the author went the extra mile with the drawbacks on the mc, imposing 4~5 handicaps. Then it turned out to be great with many things addressed and an excellent pace until around the mid hundred chapters, I was surprised by how good this turned out to be and was enjoying the story A LOT. afterwards I feel like it went downhill after the tournament arc. it's moving at a snail pace where there was no progress with the mc character for a hundred chapters (think about it, mc moved from lvl 0 to lvl 42 in less than 200 chapters then suddenly you have to grind a hundred chapters, one third of the story, where the mc lvl stagnates. To me that's killing the story with bad pace and not enjoyable one bit). Now to be fair, the story is about "kingdom building" since the title is about the base he is growing, so I would not complain that a lot of story time is spent on growing his forces, but the contrast in the pacing was too obvious. spending hundreds of chapters in events that take few months of story time is a mistake to me, especially when those events are not Central to plot AND the story is in early stages. I will probably come back to this afterwards but I am dreading the grind if the plot slows down as much as it did between lvl 42 to lvl 43.

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RVN_1998
RVN_1998Author

Thanks for the review. This problem of the speed of advance of the MC, in terms of chapters, is a problem related to the development of the territory of the MC and the present and future situation of the MC and his forces. Some explanations and developments are needed to happen before certain things... And with that, the point will come where I'll be able to move on with the story, showing only the 'action' part without compromising the story's structure. Readers will naturally understand various future developments from what is being explained here. And for a kingdom-building novel, I believe that at least the issue of independence needs to be taken very seriously. Such a thing cannot be easy. So, naturally, pieces of information need to be given before the 'story runs.' There will come a time when the story will have a good rhythm again, as before, when these explanations have finished being given. Anyway, regarding your last point, I can say that for the following levels, things will accelerate.

ewrtwe_wewe
ewrtwe_weweLv4

não sei porque mas não consiguo responder a tua respostaz vi que eras do Brazil e prontos queria dizer só que a história está boa, mas peço que leias a segunda parte da review que pus nos replies, acho que são as duas coisas com que mais estou preocupado com a história

RVN_1998:Thanks for the review. This problem of the speed of advance of the MC, in terms of chapters, is a problem related to the development of the territory of the MC and the present and future situation of the MC and his forces. Some explanations and developments are needed to happen before certain things... And with that, the point will come where I'll be able to move on with the story, showing only the 'action' part without compromising the story's structure. Readers will naturally understand various future developments from what is being explained here. And for a kingdom-building novel, I believe that at least the issue of independence needs to be taken very seriously. Such a thing cannot be easy. So, naturally, pieces of information need to be given before the 'story runs.' There will come a time when the story will have a good rhythm again, as before, when these explanations have finished being given. Anyway, regarding your last point, I can say that for the following levels, things will accelerate.
RVN_1998
RVN_1998Author

Se você está usando o app, tenta limpar o cache. Talvez resolva. Mas as vezes o webnovel realmente tem esses problemas. Algumas revisões só aparecem para mim na página da novel um ou dois dias depois. E a sua ainda não apareceu... Mas eu acho que respondi sua perguntas. Tenta ver no meu perfil.

ewrtwe_wewe:não sei porque mas não consiguo responder a tua respostaz vi que eras do Brazil e prontos queria dizer só que a história está boa, mas peço que leias a segunda parte da review que pus nos replies, acho que são as duas coisas com que mais estou preocupado com a história
RVN_1998
RVN_1998Author

Ah, se você excluiu a revisão, então realmente não dá para fazer isso...

ewrtwe_wewe:não sei porque mas não consiguo responder a tua respostaz vi que eras do Brazil e prontos queria dizer só que a história está boa, mas peço que leias a segunda parte da review que pus nos replies, acho que são as duas coisas com que mais estou preocupado com a história
ewrtwe_wewe
ewrtwe_weweLv4

eu não apaguei eu consivuo ve la mas no webnovel diz k que foi apagado

RVN_1998:Ah, se você excluiu a revisão, então realmente não dá para fazer isso...
ewrtwe_wewe
ewrtwe_weweLv4

apaguei agora e dei reupload com censura nas palavras

RVN_1998:Ah, se você excluiu a revisão, então realmente não dá para fazer isso...
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RVN_1998
RVN_1998Author

Hello there, here is the author. It's become a tradition to do self-reviews here on this site, so I won't be the one to break it... In this little review, I want to talk about the 5 points you can find when making your own review. But before that, I want to say that originally the novel will be divided into volumes, which should reach the mark of 8-10 volumes at the end. Anyway, let's get down to business. Writing quality: English is not my first language, so there will certainly be some mistakes, but I will endeavor to improve this whenever possible. Therefore, I thank you in advance for any correction indicated. Update stability: Although I have my own activities, which can prevent me from writing daily, but I have an abundance of chapters ready. So, I can guarantee that, at least in the coming months, there will be at least one chapter being released each day. As for a higher release rate or extra chapters, this will depend on the votes received by the novel. Story development: There are major and minor plots in the story that will be developed little by little. The speed of progression can be quite varied, in some points it will be a little slower and in others it will be faster. This depends on the importance of each part to the overall story. Character design: For certain reasons, the protagonist will be very intelligent from the beginning of the story. But he is still a person who needs help and who has room for improvement. There will also be some problems so that the character has a certain space to mature, so you can expect some changes to happen... World background: You can expect a lot of information from this world that the MC is in. Whenever I'm writing, I try to make it clear in the text what situation the protagonist is in. Where is he? What is the difference in strength for your opponents? What's outside the protagonist's realm? How is the world where he is? Races... Etc. Anyway, there is certainly a lot of space to be explored. Well, I think that's it. This is my first time writing, so I'm still learning... Anyway, I hope the story is satisfactory!

Ankit_Deokuliar
Ankit_DeokuliarLv2

Before thinking whether to read the novel or not just read the first chapter on author thought. The storyline and plot is surprisingly detailed and the author managed to write a story where the world doesn't revolve around MC but it's not a multiple POV type story. (Good for me) All major encounters with other characters are logical and they don't just pop out of nowhere just because the plot demands it...they are always given a little background which makes them alive and believable.... except MC's mother side of family. but I guess that will be revealed later. Side characters appear and leave logically and not because of random plot. The story has 2-3 cliche parts but the execution and results are very different from the normal...(*spoiler- there is tournaments and mc finding rare spirit beast and a young master goes after the MC for he talked to his supposed wife/girl...but in a totally different way*) Otherwise this story is kingdom building in a poor abandoned land...mc has his OP inheritance but doesn't use hack techniques to improve his land but simply expensive very scarce resources which any normal lord will spend only on himself. In short the kingdom building is realistic too, compared to other novels where mc is either reincarnation from future or from earth... Another thing in novel you will find interesting is the cultivation system and the structure of cultivation world in general. the difference between different states of cultivation is not insurmountable and those in the same stages is even more so... atleast in the starting and mid stages...this makes it interesting as just having higher cultivation doesn't mean sure victory..it comes down to how good their techniques are and thier teamwork.... This is refreshing after reading so many one man army MCs... The world-building in general is great the noble families, the commoners they act differently than the stereotype established in other novels...like nobles are oppressive and common men are miserable and only the mc saves them and they will grateful to eternity. well that's it ..I ranted a lot .... author keep up the good work, I generally don't start reading new novels unless they have 300+ chapters coz this site has given me many heartbreaks but I changed my mind after reading your first chapter so don't you dare disappoint me by dropping it.

_Olly_
_Olly_Lv15

In my opinion one of the best novels I've read on this site so far. Writing quality: apart from some very rare and minor mistakes, the writing is great, especially considering English is not the author's first language Story updates: very regular updates, generally with 2 chapters per day, but as a greedy reader it can never be enough :) Story development:I find the story in general is very well planned out and with a good progression. Main character, while stronger than others at the same level, is not instantly OP. Kingdom building is also very nicely done in a believable way. Something I'm very happy about is also that the characters don't have 1000 skills which make everything really confusing like in other novels, making fight scenes much more engaging. The main reason I gave 4 instead of 5 stars is due to the somewhat slow pace more apparent during one ark of the story (Between chapters 200-400 if I remember correctly), manly due to "information dumps" placed often in the middle of conversations (need to say though that much of this information becomes relevant afterwards so it is indeed needed, and the story still remained very interesting). Fortunately after that the pace starts picking up and is very enjoyable afterwards, not too slow but also not chaotic. Character design: characters are well designed and they act according to their personalities. There is also interesting character growth for some characters. World background: also nicely done, with distinct regional powers and interactions between them. Looking forward to how the Black Plains start interacting with the rest of the world. As for other novels I would be very happy if a there was a map available. In general I highly recommend this novel.

Jims_Rid
Jims_RidLv4

Overall, this novel is decent but there are a few issues. First is, the author explains too much. There's too much explanation about some new building and how it works. Some are unnecessary and some can be said as it is. Second, the fact that the MC dealt with no issues with the citizens apart from the fact that they're too weak is unrealistic. People get jobs and suddenly, they're happy and no problems occurred afterwards. In every place, there are always problematic people. Drunkards for example. There were even no mention of thievery in Dry City, as if everyone just turned obedient conveniently for the MC. Even if every single one of them got jobs, some habits, while they can be dealt with, they don't die easily. Mass migration from people of different places should have introduced some problems but for some reason, they were obedient. Also, the fact that people from other places could successfully migrate to the Black Plain without leaving any traces is also quite unrealistic. If it's the soldiers, then there would be no issues but civilians are hard to control, especially when they weren't yours or when the cultures are different. There is also the lack of skepticism. Although the author tried to explain this part, the fact that the whole population of a city just disappears and migrates to the Black Plain is quite unrealistic. No one stayed behind, especially the old people, who are (not all) supposed to be the most stubborn and difficult to persuade. I'm still currently on chap 371 so the author might have already addressed these on the not so recent chapters but even if he still hasn't, I hope the author reads this for improvement. Overall, this novel is, as I said, decent and full of potential.

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