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Amateur writing and dialogue probabaly because the author has poor english skills, the concept is interesting but this is 2 amateurish to enjoy. "sight I killed a person" "I need females" it's honestly childish, from what I saw this isn't author's first book so you should do better by now

Inconsistencies That's all this novel is, seriously how can you do it so much and still keep writing, every chapter and sometimes even in the same chapter the name for the same ability changes, even it's abilities that were described earlier change why??? Then there's the MC, how do you fail to immerse people in thr story is amazing, you tell us every human as soons as they have conscience is put in the game, yet, they keep calling it a game, as far as it was understood this is all they know and they all, eat, sleep, fuck everything in this game this is their reality how would they keep treating it as a game, same for MC who sincd rebirth only lived here, this would still be his reality. And omg if you came here for R18 leave it's the equivalent of a child bashing a barbie doll and a ken doll and saying it's sex I'm not even joking, that's it. Overall it's a massive disappointment I like the ability, but the author ruins it by all the Inconsistencies the lack of explanation of the power and system (ex: MC keeps saying he only has energies for this or that but we never see how much one ability costs this is done so author can pull anything out of his ass) I'm not even sure if this is an original work, it very much seems like a badly translated novel, stop writting more chapter or translating and fix everything, if your free chapters are this much of a pain to read you can forget about spending money on it

I believe I need at least 500 chapters to properly rank this. There hasn't been a lot of development yet imo but so far what I've seen is pretty good, no major mistakes characters have personality there's real threats etc... Biggest complain is just that I think it sucks he can't have both Abyss and Divinity, I mean 10x should be enough to give a constitution for both if he got linked to so someone that got a Paradox constitution no? But yeah the system isn't used a lot so still want to see more of it, the story overall is great

They are 14 it's the first webnovel book where this is acceptable, still cringe but at that age I could see it

the start was cliche but decent and the english is good. but the whole story is so on the nose and childish also what's the point of making characters 18 if they act like they are 12, it's obvious it's only for the 18+ tag and because you want to avoid problems there but then you can't write then as adults. Everyone is very childish, the teachers the plot... etc, disapointing that a Holy Necromancer story lost it, you should try to read Grandson of the holy emperor is a necromancer it's very good

I'll add I dropped at chapter 6 but reading now that the author says the story will be more about Romance I feel like this is going to be awful

Sorry I can't, it's really cringe in a lot of ways, first of all Chap 1 starts with just telling us how amazing the MC is, please "Show don't tell" is one of the most basic things, and then the fact every girl is immediately attracted to him it's "a perfect MC who every girl like but likes no girls and even treats beautiful girls like they are just paper because he is such a chad", so cringe, and the sister and mother being infatuated with him, omg.... this is so bad. The world itself might be interesting high world / middle world and then I can see it being interesting with artefacts etc, the English is also pretty good so I give it that, but the story is 2 cringe for me especially for a story that is supposed to be 18+, I can't take it seriously it's like the Japanese MC trope except in here he will get to have sex (I assume since it's 18+). Autor if you see this remove the cringe and the story might be good, I'm assuming the story is decent here since it had some good basics, just take this as a fanfiction first try at writing and then the next book will be great.

does that happen in the novel "dual cultivation"? or any novel you know that seems fun

do not read this absolute thrash 4 years since the first chapter and no grammar has been fixed this looks like the worst MTL you could imagine, any review above 1 is fake or a bot

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