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DaoistXeous
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2021-07-11 02:02

A good novel is one where the opening line catches your eye and pulls you in for an adventure. In my opinion, coming from my experience of reading hundreds of books, novels are detailed enough to allow the mindscape to picture the described world with ease and have a cacophony of interesting twists and turns make successful novels. At this point in writing the review, I've just finished chapter 266: Runecrafting. The novel is well developed in terms of world description, character design, details in describing items, and overall well written. There are some minor writing flaws, but nothing is perfect. All in all, Great work so far, Author! I'm thoroughly enjoying this work.

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UnrivaledArcaner
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Thank you very much! I will work harder :)

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The mc starts of strong, pragmatic and grounded. Then he gets a fairy guide and turns into a weak, scatterbrained moron. I liked the initial 25 or so chapters of the story, but with the complete 180 in personality and competence, it began to just grind on my nerves. It showed in the fights of chapter 28 and 29, then with him going from a hoarder on the avarage skyrim player level in chapter to some moron at chapter 30 who doesn't want to pick up loot because he doesn't use those items... When he's carrying a back full of junk items to sell... And needing his fairy guide to point out the obvious in a ridiculing manner, I dropped It. The way I see it, it's like two people worked on this story, the first 25 chapters or so were by a person who liked to write a competent story but lost interest. And the second by a person who had a total thing for the usual incompetant characters who need minders to tell their left hand from their right, along with tropes and clichés. Its like seeing a high rated Litrpg novel start, only to have some weebo wanting it into some kind of mix wuxia / harem anime hybrid. Perhaps the story was written by copy pasting events from other novels, then having the patchwork rewritten as one thing to make it a whole, without keeping the character and his personality in mind. That's not a bad way to write a new story, after all originality these days is just well stolen concepts applied in uncommon ways, but the loss of sight of the character's original engaging personality causing it to be exchanged for a moron with an overbearing fairy who needs to hold his hand lest he trips over his own feet is not cool. I think I would be much more interested in the story if the MC was more consistent in his character.

Althen
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Here we go. I’m at around chapter 85. Loved how it started, author covered the basics, why the MC knows this and that,etc. I love the gaming elements novels, and the mystery with the character that dies with a couple of great items but not breaking balance completely is done well. Now unfortunately it gets worse. The MC is introduced as a veteran gamer of various VR games, with at least some training in martial arts. Then as the game keeps goings he forgets more and more of this gaming knowledge (note, im ok with him not being an expert or godly reflexes,etc, but not evolving as fast as you can inspect, making noob mistakes and forgetting basic gaming elements… I hate when you dumb an MC). We add to that a helper, a guide in the form of a fairy. I like that, even when she does not tell you everything, but only if the reason is because she can’t (rules). Defenetly not because of her ego, snappy remarks, rudeness, sense of superiority, etc. And the MC reactions being to act timidly and senseless. I also did not like him keeping a guy who gets into trouble to hide under you after throwing the rock. Really? That’s the companion he wants to stick with? Finally, I am going after starting a quest where he knows he is being manipulated, knows a solution (kill him or blackmail him back, or at least tell the truth about the quest) and still does nothing. Once this issues are solved the novel can be quite good. Good idea, good background, good writing and stable updates. But the before mentioned just makes it more unbereable the more you read. Keep it up author, it’s good work, but try to improve on the mentioned.

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