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DaoistXeous
DaoistXeousLv153yr
2021-07-11 02:02

A good novel is one where the opening line catches your eye and pulls you in for an adventure. In my opinion, coming from my experience of reading hundreds of books, novels are detailed enough to allow the mindscape to picture the described world with ease and have a cacophony of interesting twists and turns make successful novels. At this point in writing the review, I've just finished chapter 266: Runecrafting. The novel is well developed in terms of world description, character design, details in describing items, and overall well written. There are some minor writing flaws, but nothing is perfect. All in all, Great work so far, Author! I'm thoroughly enjoying this work.

Second World

UnrivaledArcaner
4.2
2012 Chs

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UnrivaledArcaner
UnrivaledArcanerAuthor

Thank you very much! I will work harder :)

3yr
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TagDaReaper
TagDaReaperLv5

The story is getting worse as it progresses. MC was cautious and smart at the start, then he became dumber as the story progressed. He became dumbest when he got a companion fairy. Then he forgot almost all his gaming knowledge. Earlier when he thought that death was permanent, he was fine killing fellow humans. Later he found out it was only temporary, now he spares other humans. His personality also changed. Now he likes showing off and not finishing the fights quickly. I stuck so far because i liked the starting. I still think it would have been an excellent story if the author didn't purposely made it worse. To keep the story excellent all he had to do was make the MC's character consistent. Was is too much to ask for?

3yr

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SUBSCRIBE_MY_LISTLv5

The mc starts of strong, pragmatic and grounded. Then he gets a fairy guide and turns into a weak, scatterbrained moron. I liked the initial 25 or so chapters of the story, but with the complete 180 in personality and competence, it began to just grind on my nerves. It showed in the fights of chapter 28 and 29, then with him going from a hoarder on the avarage skyrim player level in chapter to some moron at chapter 30 who doesn't want to pick up loot because he doesn't use those items... When he's carrying a back full of junk items to sell... And needing his fairy guide to point out the obvious in a ridiculing manner, I dropped It. The way I see it, it's like two people worked on this story, the first 25 chapters or so were by a person who liked to write a competent story but lost interest. And the second by a person who had a total thing for the usual incompetant characters who need minders to tell their left hand from their right, along with tropes and clichés. Its like seeing a high rated Litrpg novel start, only to have some weebo wanting it into some kind of mix wuxia / harem anime hybrid. Perhaps the story was written by copy pasting events from other novels, then having the patchwork rewritten as one thing to make it a whole, without keeping the character and his personality in mind. That's not a bad way to write a new story, after all originality these days is just well stolen concepts applied in uncommon ways, but the loss of sight of the character's original engaging personality causing it to be exchanged for a moron with an overbearing fairy who needs to hold his hand lest he trips over his own feet is not cool. I think I would be much more interested in the story if the MC was more consistent in his character.

3yr
glacer_blade
glacer_bladeLv4

great story,the bad things that I think should be improve in the story is the mc intelligence, not a smart in not to stupid mc but sometime mc don't think enough or analysis more in certain situation so more failure hope it get better in the way the story progress and my personal problem is now he got a guide and there interaction in mc being dumb and I hate that, as a reader I want the mc to be smarter or use some thinking when he is talking to other people.

3yr
Kenrio
KenrioLv11

changed my mind about this novel. the mc is not only a complete moron but is a bitch to a guy he know for only a day. the guy is the typical hero complex weakling and the mc is the one that have to wipe his ass from the troubles he can resolve. it's really frustrating to read and destroyed all my good feeling of the novel until he become friend w/o the someone even more dumb than him and much more weaker .

3yr
TrippleWix
TrippleWixLv15

Start is good, rest is not, dont waste your time with this one and shovel some more MC gets only more and more stupid, and overall just a big disappointment

3yr
vamsip001
vamsip001Lv13

yes Mc played sevaral vr rpg and thinks about all the possibilities and chances to improve his fighting ability but and starts good upto 27 chaptets and get fairy guide and stops thinking even simplest things and it turns worse he got boost to fight an enemy but forget he had good skill that increases his attack powet and panics when boost was about end and was repairminded by fairy it was very boring to read to begin with but it gets even worse

3yr
Althen
AlthenLv5

Here we go. I’m at around chapter 85. Loved how it started, author covered the basics, why the MC knows this and that,etc. I love the gaming elements novels, and the mystery with the character that dies with a couple of great items but not breaking balance completely is done well. Now unfortunately it gets worse. The MC is introduced as a veteran gamer of various VR games, with at least some training in martial arts. Then as the game keeps goings he forgets more and more of this gaming knowledge (note, im ok with him not being an expert or godly reflexes,etc, but not evolving as fast as you can inspect, making noob mistakes and forgetting basic gaming elements… I hate when you dumb an MC). We add to that a helper, a guide in the form of a fairy. I like that, even when she does not tell you everything, but only if the reason is because she can’t (rules). Defenetly not because of her ego, snappy remarks, rudeness, sense of superiority, etc. And the MC reactions being to act timidly and senseless. I also did not like him keeping a guy who gets into trouble to hide under you after throwing the rock. Really? That’s the companion he wants to stick with? Finally, I am going after starting a quest where he knows he is being manipulated, knows a solution (kill him or blackmail him back, or at least tell the truth about the quest) and still does nothing. Once this issues are solved the novel can be quite good. Good idea, good background, good writing and stable updates. But the before mentioned just makes it more unbereable the more you read. Keep it up author, it’s good work, but try to improve on the mentioned.

3yr
Wuxia_1
Wuxia_1Lv1

The character got so bad I just couldn't keep reading, especially since that fairy came he just became so dumb. Why did he become such a wimp?

3yr
khirigaya_kazuto
khirigaya_kazutoLv4

The mc starts of strong, pragmatic and grounded. Then he gets a fairy guide and turns into a weak, scatterbrained moron.//////////////////////////////////////////

3yr
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Rakib_Hasan_0001Lv4

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