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amaturewriterLv44yr
2021-01-24 18:45

I read this and all I can say is the MC isnt developed. He is supposed to be a grown man that was killed by his lover and got a second chance. but instead he acts like a kid, and not some *****. He seems more like a pre****. no hint of maturity. And theres no proper planning of what to do [ he has his goals of wanting to protect family, thats there ] but the actual execution isnt. this should be explored. He hasnt made any plans on that and rather focuses on his school life. And the MC is a mental retard or atleast denser than a neutron star. 8 yrs of marriage, wife never slept with him and he never got the hint that she didnt even like him, even in his death he said I though u loved me, didnt realise she hated him after she shot him [ what happens in story- unless changed ] And this isnt some **** thing ,,,no they are mature adults and MC dosnt have any mental illness. so he is just stupid. this cant even be passed off as disillusion of a yandere lover cause if she disliked the MC this much why the fk wouldnt u not notice? for 8 yrs? does not make sense. suggestion.. instead of focusing on the the social life, etc focus on the MC himself and his actual planning and execution and use of future knowledge to do things and show this. the planning, execution, process, etc. And try to mature the MC. he honestly feels like some pre t.een rather than an *****. the face slapping moments and him feeling better than kids all way younger than him makes more apparent. I read this couple months ago here...same author? **: that story had a pretty stupid moment where no one recognized him after he cut his hair. and it was soo exaggerated and focused on. the couple chps after the hair cut were all about the people not realizing its him or chicks getting wet over him. so forced. Hair cuts change people , definitely agree....but to this extent where the mother, father and brother dosnt realize? so stupid [ and this is why I remember this bk and am asking whether u are the same author, if u are, do avoid this moment ] - *

A Chance To Become An Adonis

Teaisnice
4.1
740 Chs

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Yamiya
YamiyaLv4

Thanks 🙏 for the review of the RECENT chapters

3yr
4
Villain116
Villain116Lv3

Someone finally understood my pain when I first read this novel and I had a feeling that he will definitely forgive his past wife lol. Just thinking about it makes me unbearable. 😭😭😭

3yr
20
Worn_out_by
Worn_out_byLv15

So a waste of time with bs 5 stars

3yr
1
jmori2010
jmori2010Lv15

Well maybe his haircut is his superpower, like Clark Kent with his glasses. On a more serious note, thank you for saving me from wasting my time reading this... I can't believe he never even consummated his marriage in the eight years of marriage... was he impotent? mentally challenged?? Gay??? I'm surprised the poor wife didn't just get an annulment 🤨

2yr
6
Blue_Bird_0758
Blue_Bird_0758Lv4

just like the Tales of gods and demons. Mc 😆 there the mc is also an total idiot. same to same

2yr
2
Ancient_Rebel
Ancient_RebelLv12

finally , this is called a good review. You saved me from wasting time buddy

2yr
1
Karthik_Kumar_5864
Karthik_Kumar_5864Lv12

Thanks for saving my time.

2yr
DevilDarkness
DevilDarknessLv4

thanks man. u really saved me there. I was going to read this after reading it's summary but after reading ur review I checked some other reviews and I was beyond disappointed. I am even amazed that plot like this can get 400+ chapters and still people will read it 🤮🤮🤮I pity d fools with no brain. TO SUMMARIZE THIS BOOK - mc got killed by his wife after getting ntr'ed by her and being a licking dog for more than a decade and not even being able to touch her hand even after 8 years of marriage. he reincarnated and guess what forget revenge he's trying hard to win her favor again by licking her even harder. after 400 chapters he's still thinking of how to win her forgetting she cheated on him in both his lives(yeah he got d green hat even in his second life) and he still licks her. I don't even know of d word dumb and stupid can even describe his brain working anymore

1yr
5
reestuds
reestudsLv2

uh

DevilDarkness:thanks man. u really saved me there. I was going to read this after reading it's summary but after reading ur review I checked some other reviews and I was beyond disappointed. I am even amazed that plot like this can get 400+ chapters and still people will read it 🤮🤮🤮I pity d fools with no brain. TO SUMMARIZE THIS BOOK - mc got killed by his wife after getting ntr'ed by her and being a licking dog for more than a decade and not even being able to touch her hand even after 8 years of marriage. he reincarnated and guess what forget revenge he's trying hard to win her favor again by licking her even harder. after 400 chapters he's still thinking of how to win her forgetting she cheated on him in both his lives(yeah he got d green hat even in his second life) and he still licks her. I don't even know of d word dumb and stupid can even describe his brain working anymore
1yr
DevilDarkness
DevilDarknessLv4

save urself from the brain tumor

reestuds:uh
1yr
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I_lat3_y0u
I_lat3_y0uLv3

**sigh**, i really pity those that did not know this piece of art cause this is so awesome so author - sama please continue updating😆😆😎😎

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I have read till 185 on scribble hub, I like it but its too slow and I would prefer if the harem development would be fast, it is taking too long.

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Gilgamesh_8387
Gilgamesh_8387Lv1

a lot of stupid things, for example: after the haircut, he turned into a different person. That is, he is so stupid that he covered his face with his hair and wants to please the girl !? He thinks only about the girl and doesn't care that she doesn't like him and she sleeps with another? He wants to take revenge but is stupid and does nothing that can help this and if you say that this is not so, then more than 100 chapters have passed, he did not even kill his lover wife, that is, he could hire a hitman even if he could not kill himself

3yr
complexsolution
complexsolutionLv12

Reveal spoiler

4yr
Adrion_Lord
Adrion_LordLv13

Reveal spoiler

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Animelover1416
Animelover1416Lv5

Author please make some character growth for Lu Chen. I mean he is letting himself spitted by that bitch and his lover. And that dumb fatty is getting on my nerves. I mean fatty who is a rich kid is bootlicking long Chen without any background. And till this day I don't understand what that shrew had seen in this pretending to be moon light guy. In contrast MC is rich and devoted. If this harlot had said once to him about academics,then I am sure he would have done well in studies also. Just what is the problem of this slut to treat him like garbage.

3yr
MoullMahraz
MoullMahrazLv14

What I hate the most is the dense mc ...........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

2yr
Sjar
SjarLv13

Don't know why there is few reviews here but this story is actually pretty good the character design 4 but Im pretty sure he will improve more the the World background is 5 the story development is also 5 so this story in my opinion is a solid gold...

4yr
Someone_Or_Other
Someone_Or_OtherLv15

Writing quality: third grade. The author doesn't know anything at all about English, and it shows. They constantly misuse punctuation marks, have no clue of the difference between your and you're, the language used is basic, and it's littered with typos and grammar errors. 2/5 Update stability: no clue, but giving it a 1/5 because this abomination deserves a low overall rating. Story development: missing. As of chapter 89, nothing of any note has happened except for the absolute worst examples of tropes. I rate this a 1/5 and would rate it lower if it was possible. My actual rating in this category would easily be a zero. Character design: the worst. I haven't seen dumber characters on this entire platform, and considering I've seen literally hundreds of novels on the Webnovel platform, that's truly saying something. The main character's brain could be used to forge Mjolnir, the best friend is the most annoying combination of best friend tropes, the ex-wife is irredeemably stupid, and... well, everyone is the dumbest version of their particular collections of cliches that it's possible to be. 1/5 and I would recommend to this author in particular that they keep their day job, because being an author is just something they shouldn't do. World background: abysmal. The bog standard modern-day face slapping novel, but the absolute worst version of that in every category. 1/5 Overall: I had low expectations but was somehow still disappointed. This showed up in my WN weekly recommendations for some unknown reason (someone probably sold their soul to the devil), and I started reading it solely because the chapters weren't locked. I regret it and wish I could light the brain cells containing the memory of this failed abortion on fire and burn them to complete and utter nonexistence. I regret very little about my life so far, but reading 89 chapters of this garbage excuse for a novel is one of those rare regrets. Author, I hope that you have to answer every seventh question you're asked with the phrase "in my butt" for the next four and a half years.

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