Item: Love's Penalties
Rating: 4
Author: RedCeiling

RedCeilingLv54yr

2021-04-29 15:07

A respectable attempt. Nice take on sexual fidelity. Written in first person past tense (limited perspective). Pros: The characters have great integrity and loyalty towards eachother. Cons: Grammatical and punctuation errors in some chapters while others are good (perhaps some are yet to be edited), constant switching between POVs (I feel it is inconsistent; you might like it). I am at chapter 24 now and the while the characters have their strong points, they are rather irrational something (is love truly blind?) and the side characters show excessive care for the FL and ML alike. Perhaps the author wanted too keep the focus of the story intact but that made the side characters start to feel inanimate after some time. Overall, give it a chance. With some editing, it can turn out to be a great work.

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