TLDR, This stories like a writing project a 7th grader would turn in and get a C for. Interesting at first, cliche after cliche, to instant power-up and time skip, to adventuring with no clear purpose but a slight hero complex, no clear understanding of how strong the MC is. Apparently he's a "Sage" but we never really get a clear understanding of the world's power scale and how strong a "sage" is supposed to be, from what I can see so far he seems like a 2nd rate magician with a few single and multi-target spells, nothing that can kill over 10 people really. He kills completely evil people like slavers who killed his father and (maybe r*ped his mother? author was never clear) also killed his mother, or a fat old noble lady who threw one of her slaves to be r*ped by 3 men then killed, then shoved a fire poker up the bum of the other cat girl. But then feels bad and like he wasn't supposed to do that. He gets on the wrong side of a receptionist because of his naiveness who starts discriminating and bullying him even sending him to a brothel and a recommendation to one of those male-like female cliche characters. He then stays there despite paying more or less the same as a normal inn despite knowing where some normal inns are (place he stayed at when he first came in the city). Theres alot more stupid stuff like this to read in this book but ill end it here otherwise this review wouldnt be readable. It's not bad to have a few cliches and unlikeable characters, you just have to balance it out with your own original ideas and interesting plot points. For example, it doesn't make sense for the receptionist to be mad at the MC for so long, or the MC to just sit there and take her abuse without easily clearing things up, or to be staying in the brothel like hotel for so long when there are clearly other options for the same price. You could have at least gave a destination for the MC other than "wandering around relying on plot armor for lucky encounters". For example, finding some lost relic of the succubus race that his mother had, or seeking out his fathers sister in the capital to check up on her and write from there. These are some basic examples but a little can go a long way.
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it's funny because it takes time to build things, and you did not reach any of them and just stopped thinking that it's going to be like that for the rest of the story. Anyway, ty for giving a chance to a 7th grader when English is not even his first language.
with writing, using the start to build up an intriguing premise or unique world background that will draw the reader in, it was just disappointing that you built upon some of these principles, then ruin everything with a bunch of cliche drops. It's like watching someone draw a beautiful painting, only to scribble all over it. Even more frustrating because you killed what could have been something great. Ideas are universal, language is only a barrier when it comes to some of the finer details. I see authors on here use this as an excuse for their poor writing when really, it only applies to misgendering of words or misspellings. I gave this book a chance for over 40+ chapters and found myself disappointed again and again. You cant expect readers to stay longer than that to give your story a chance with an empty promise that it'll get better. Sorry dude.
Tengu_San:it's funny because it takes time to build things, and you did not reach any of them and just stopped thinking that it's going to be like that for the rest of the story. Anyway, ty for giving a chance to a 7th grader when English is not even his first language.
