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VioleP
ViolePLv13yr
2021-04-08 19:38

Hands down one of the best World Building I've ever seen. The plot is amazing, and you are making me want to improve overall as a writer. Hope you continue because I added this to my library so I am looking forward to it!

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Tengu_San
Tengu_SanAuthor

Thank you for your kindness! I may not a good writer and I may not know perfect English, but world building is the one thing I do take pride in it. Thanks again for pointing that out ;)

etkowatches
etkowatchesLv15

never read tolkien?

Tengu_San
Tengu_SanAuthor

If I were able to do only one thousandth of Tolkien's worldbuilding, I would call it victory.

etkowatches:never read tolkien?
Lol2021
Lol2021Lv14

Well Tolkien is like the Grandfather of worldbuilding and fanatasy no one can match up with what he wrote Even now when i read his books I have this feeling that he actual saw everything that he wrote

etkowatches:never read tolkien?
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Mathdebate
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TLDR, This stories like a writing project a 7th grader would turn in and get a C for. Interesting at first, cliche after cliche, to instant power-up and time skip, to adventuring with no clear purpose but a slight hero complex, no clear understanding of how strong the MC is. Apparently he's a "Sage" but we never really get a clear understanding of the world's power scale and how strong a "sage" is supposed to be, from what I can see so far he seems like a 2nd rate magician with a few single and multi-target spells, nothing that can kill over 10 people really. He kills completely evil people like slavers who killed his father and (maybe r*ped his mother? author was never clear) also killed his mother, or a fat old noble lady who threw one of her slaves to be r*ped by 3 men then killed, then shoved a fire poker up the bum of the other cat girl. But then feels bad and like he wasn't supposed to do that. He gets on the wrong side of a receptionist because of his naiveness who starts discriminating and bullying him even sending him to a brothel and a recommendation to one of those male-like female cliche characters. He then stays there despite paying more or less the same as a normal inn despite knowing where some normal inns are (place he stayed at when he first came in the city). Theres alot more stupid stuff like this to read in this book but ill end it here otherwise this review wouldnt be readable. It's not bad to have a few cliches and unlikeable characters, you just have to balance it out with your own original ideas and interesting plot points. For example, it doesn't make sense for the receptionist to be mad at the MC for so long, or the MC to just sit there and take her abuse without easily clearing things up, or to be staying in the brothel like hotel for so long when there are clearly other options for the same price. You could have at least gave a destination for the MC other than "wandering around relying on plot armor for lucky encounters". For example, finding some lost relic of the succubus race that his mother had, or seeking out his fathers sister in the capital to check up on her and write from there. These are some basic examples but a little can go a long way.

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