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Sage_of_HeavenLv13yr
2021-08-09 15:01

Hello author I really enjoy your story,but I have critique for this story. -The story is very slow pace. Usually this will not be a problem for me,but I have hard time getting through chapter due to how slow it is. -The Romance feel rush. I felt that there should have been more time developing the romance aspect. -Author you have a problem of over explaining the dialogue. This contribute to the story feeling slow and boring for me. Well that all my critique for this if you fix these issue. You will certainly create one of the best or the best One Piece Fanfic that I ever read. But you have to overcome challenges like the Fanfic This Bite. Well who know you might surpass that story someday and became my number one favorite one piece fanfic. Well that all have a wonderful day and good luck.👋👋👋👋

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Thanks for the review, criticism. Something I already know and try to improve in this regard. (slow-pacing wise) Romance-wise, it will develop. Might feel rushed to you, but Sofiya will be there for many chapters to come, and you will see the development in that regard. Thanks for the review, and yeah, have a good day too.

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