after i binge read it chapter 70 got to reviews so i can drop my 2 cent to this novel. after i organized my thoughts, here's what i think. i love'd the prologe cuz i thought the MC will have complex personality, i was genuinely excited to follow on how will a suicide man react and interact after reincarnating in a fictional world, then i got hit with the almost 50 chapters of monotone training until canon started then another 20 of blitzing enemy's i was honestly dissapointed. i have alot more of minor complains like how the other characters lack of reaction to the action of MC and some other points,but my biggest gripe about this novel is how the MC has no you know... a lack of goal to strive, like sure he trains to get stronger but evry other MC that reincarnate in another world do that. what i want to find out is "why" he do what he does, "what" is the the end goal? none so far so patiently waiting for a character development but again none, again, i was doing saitama OK. face while i was reading training chapter's sure the "new" sharingan jutsus are cool, but what i find this novel lacks sorely is lack of MC interactions to other characters and godamn monotone dialogue suck! Example. after the orochi and sand invation the dialoge between MC and the hokage goes like this... MC: step down hokage you old i get a new one to replace you. Sarutobi:uhmmm OK....... then onto the next grinding for a new jutsu. like what what about the say of the elder council, what say of the major clan heads, where's the discussion, like WHAT??? i was so sad this was a major turning point for konoha and for the story to progress but it evryting was put aside like evryone was onboard and hold hands and go kumbayah... there was no conflict???. MC goes to tsunade to ask him to be hokage then tsunade just said yes instantly??? why? how? like what the??? no interaction what so ever its hard to get attached and root for MC cuz all he do is train and kill enemy like for godsake, it made the novel monotone and boring as hell. author gave us glipses of character development then suddenly pull's away for some more training.... ill try to see where the story will form here on out and wait and keep reading, hope author improve the interactions, reactions,dialoge, and have the MC have a solid goal to achive till then, this novel get's a 3 stars from me, if a see a improvement ill change me review.
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Hey there, thanks for the review. You are quite right at almost all of your statements. The problem is I made a lot of restrictions for myself, for example the MC is depressive and is heavily anti-social. He won't really speak with people, and if he needs to convince someone he will use a show of force to intimidate. People will do as he says because his strength seems to be on the top, not something they can simply oppose. I understand this is a bad combo and is a base for uninteresting content. I never intended this fanfic to become a great character drama, more like a technical training-ish not too long story with an overpowered character going around doing suff. This is my first work, and I too believe its mediocre, by now I made so many restrictions around the character and the world that it would be really hard to bring it out of the hole (not that I want to). For now this has to stay like this, its obviously not worth rewriting all of it, I'd rather start something different. But before that I made up my mind to finish this. I perfectly understand if people decide to drop it. Thanks for your thoughts, best wishes.
i undestand man writing is verry harrrdd and i just hope i didnt sound too harsh in my review. i still love your work, like i said in my review ill still continue to read it and see how things go from here. . . I really appreaciate you author for being understanding and not just lash out and berrate people, when they dont rate novel with less than 5 stars like other authors out there. i hope you the best my guy stay safe and healthy.
I put this comment to remember not to read this story, thanks for your sacrifice
you can try again. why? you now have to much good and simple reference. and note: I don't really open my comments so I'll probably take years to read reply 😂 I'll give you an idea if you're experimenting with emotions. summoning horror fiction system in a world where people can create their own worlds and battle for resources. of course the enemy's are alien and other wolders. start by simple the intense battles where MC's summons are immortal in some ways. lol
