Read up to chap. 7. Love it so far, Only thing is knocked 1 star off writing due to putting "Kim:" or "Me:" in front of the dialogue instead of writing something like "Kim yells to me" or "I whispered to Kim" or something similar. I know it's probably so readers don't get confused who's speaking if there are more than 3 people, but it makes it read more like a screenplay or a script rather than a fiction story. Anyway, if you work on that aspect it'd be perfect.
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LIKEThat's fine. It's a minor point anyway that won't really stop me from reading. Just thought I should explain it as it's the reason I took off a star since it's something similar that's only used in scripts/screenplays.