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Nevren
NevrenLv13yr
2021-08-12 04:24

In general the novels okay, if you have something else to read you should but this isn't a total waste of time. More specifically it's full of especially cliche moments and characters (especially the mc who has every power ever) yet it does a good enough job of not throwing these problems in your face that you can learn to ignore them. Easily the worst part of the novel is the mc, the author makes him this "supah specul" chosen one with all the powers ever yet is also extremely weak whenever there a real confrontation to be had because logic or not the author wants a fight scene and weakens the mc to "make it interesting". It's one of the worst fanfic cliches to me, like if you're gonna have an OP mc at least commit to it, don't waffle, waffling is way worse. Still the work shines through in the character relationships, they're pretty good and they end up seeming fairly natural even if , again, they're not anything truly special.

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Yasashiki
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Thanks for the review, though I don’t consider how I wrote the relationships to be something great, I always feel that it lacks emotions. I agree that it’s far from being a great fanfiction, this is my first one and I decided to start by doing something easy, I.E a reincarnated Mc with great power in a finished story, though I decided for him to be born long before the canon since I consider a story where Mc is reborn as the protagonist or at the start of the canon too lazy most of the time. Also, I’m sure you wrote the ‘Mc feels nerfed’ in chapter 34(I think that’s the one) where its the only time he gets thrashed at the start of a fight, while it is explained as to why he lost at first since he did not use his Sharingan as he didn’t want people to know about them (though he had to in the end) and also he only tried to fight him in Taijutsu and I overpowered his foe, not nerfed the Mc. So writing it as if I nerfed the Mc all the story in your review while it ‘happen’ only once is kind of mean, to be honest. But whatever, you’re not the first to put a review that uses one single chapter as a negative aspect to describe a whole story.

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