webnovel
Nevren
NevrenLv13yr
2021-08-12 04:24

In general the novels okay, if you have something else to read you should but this isn't a total waste of time. More specifically it's full of especially cliche moments and characters (especially the mc who has every power ever) yet it does a good enough job of not throwing these problems in your face that you can learn to ignore them. Easily the worst part of the novel is the mc, the author makes him this "supah specul" chosen one with all the powers ever yet is also extremely weak whenever there a real confrontation to be had because logic or not the author wants a fight scene and weakens the mc to "make it interesting". It's one of the worst fanfic cliches to me, like if you're gonna have an OP mc at least commit to it, don't waffle, waffling is way worse. Still the work shines through in the character relationships, they're pretty good and they end up seeming fairly natural even if , again, they're not anything truly special.

Liked by 12 people

LIKE
Replies1
Yasashiki
YasashikiAuthor

Thanks for the review, though I don’t consider how I wrote the relationships to be something great, I always feel that it lacks emotions. I agree that it’s far from being a great fanfiction, this is my first one and I decided to start by doing something easy, I.E a reincarnated Mc with great power in a finished story, though I decided for him to be born long before the canon since I consider a story where Mc is reborn as the protagonist or at the start of the canon too lazy most of the time. Also, I’m sure you wrote the ‘Mc feels nerfed’ in chapter 34(I think that’s the one) where its the only time he gets thrashed at the start of a fight, while it is explained as to why he lost at first since he did not use his Sharingan as he didn’t want people to know about them (though he had to in the end) and also he only tried to fight him in Taijutsu and I overpowered his foe, not nerfed the Mc. So writing it as if I nerfed the Mc all the story in your review while it ‘happen’ only once is kind of mean, to be honest. But whatever, you’re not the first to put a review that uses one single chapter as a negative aspect to describe a whole story.

Other Reviews
PeaceBeforeImpact
PeaceBeforeImpactLv15
TimeBender
TimeBenderLv1

It is far above the average naruto fanfiction, but still nothing impressive. There are quite a few better than this, but it far outshines the average ones. The writing quality is average, but the story makes up for it a bit. There are some grammatic issues, weird phrasing, awkward descriptions and the like, but it is still readable. The world background is developed a bit, but is still lacking. There are some issues with logic and inconsistency, as well as the lack of understanding the world. Some earth shaking changes made in the story have ZERO effect on the world. For example, Minato learned the Flying Raijin in less than a year. If it was so easy to master, the world would've been different. And this is just one of many. THE PLOT is ok, nothing spectacular, but has some original points. Characters are decent, but still have a lot of issues. The author somehow thinks that behaviour is genetic? WHAT? (Example with shisui) And ignores most of the changes the MC's presence would bring to the people. And now for the MC. He does actually think a bit, but not that much. He doesn't use his knowledge to his full advantage and just stays in Konoha being content. With his power, he could transform the world in years, create ways to grow at insane speeds, raise children to be powerhouses, revolutionize the education system, bring out new reforms, improve the lives of all, unite the world under one banner and so so so so so much more. Yet he stays in Konoha doing nothing. I know this is partly because of Madara, but it is still a bad excuse for lazy writing. The MC was stronger than Madara long ago, yet he for whatever reason persists his stupidity.

Related Stories

Dimensional Trader in Marvel

One day, after waking up from a dream, Josh found himself transported from the 21st century to Chicago in 1943, transformed into a poor young boy on the streets. World War II? For Josh, who wasn't even 18 yet, it seemed too scary. But as an orphan, the most important thing for him was figuring out how to survive in this era. Fortunately, he had a Dimensional Trading System, and in this time, being a Interdimensional trader seemed like it could provide a comfortable life. However, a few months later, just as his life started to improve, Josh stared in silence at the stage of a war charity performance, where Captain America was singing and dancing with a group of girls. It's over. He was doomed. This place was actually the Marvel Universe! ___________________ What to Expect: [Moderate Pace] [Family] [Slice of Life] [Smart MC] [Businessman] [Poor to Rich] [History] [War] [World Conquer] [No Harem (Till Now Atleast)] Worlds in the Fanfic: Crossovers: Marvel, Nosferatu, Peaky Blinders, The Godfather, Mafia Game (Vito and Johnny), Sabrina (1954 film), Dial M for Murder (1954 film), Dracula Untold (Not Sure but there are hints), and more in the future. Other Worlds: The World of WarCraft, Game of Thrones, Red Alert, Equilibrium, I, Robot, and more in the future. Daily Updates!! + Extra Chapters for PS Goals. ___________________ If you want to support and get early access to the chapters, join patreon.com/AHumanMadeMOFO to read 60+ Chapters ahead of others.

AHumanMadeMOFO · Anime & Comics
4.7
252 Chs

I Stream DC on Marvel

My name is Allen Walker. I lived a quiet and uneventful life until I got into trouble with the school's ultimate bully, Flash Thomson. It was worth it because I was able to protect my friend Gwen and help out a poor guy named Peter Parker. That's right... my life was turned upside down with my school problems. I somehow ended up tangled with bullies like Flash and his rich friend Harry Osborn, and the three beauties of the school, Gwen Stacy, Felicia Hardy, and Mary Jane. I understood why Gwen was there, as she's my friend, but I couldn't understand why the other two girls were interested in me. My destiny should have been getting beaten up by the school bullies, but luckily, I received unexpected help from a miraculous entity called the "The Absolute Content Creator System". This system mainly operates based on viewers and the popularity I gain by providing great content in my world. But somehow, I'm now live-streaming in the middle of the Superman vs. Doomsday fight... yes, it sounds very dangerous and stupid. No one told me I'd be going to the DC world to livestream?! Darkseid is going to kill me!! My aunt Natasha would scream at me for the stupidity I was committing, and she would be right, I mean, I'm streaming it to my world! But I have to be here, even if it's stupid and dangerous. The reason? I have a huge debt of one million dollars because I accidentally ordered a hundred fantasy waifu sex dolls... which have come to life for some reason. Yeah, things are getting complicated!! It sounds insane, but it's real. The first doll was Wednesday Addams, who tried to stab me, and the second was 2B from Nier: Automata, who treated me like her master... I won't complain about that. A bit confusing? Let's recap: - I live in a world that the system calls Marvel... I'm not sure if I should be worried. - I was a normal teenager making YouTube videos and streams, not very popular... – I got involved with the school beauties and that earned me the hatred of the bullies... ¿why? - I was chosen by a system related to content creation. - During a stream, my chat played a prank on me, and I ended up accidentally ordering a hundred very expensive sex dolls that left me in a one-million-dollar debt. - These dolls are coming to life for some reason. - To pay off that debt, I have to use the system that sends me to DC and broadcast craziness like Batman being captured by the Joker or some villain fighting the Justice League. It's not all bad. With a system like in the manga, I become stronger the more popular I get. I gain powers that only appear in comics and anime, and many other things. But, as I said, my world is not normal, and I'll end up getting involved in dangerous things. I knew that when a one-eyed man appeared at my door and said, "Do you know about the Avengers Initiative?"... I think I should definitely be worried about that. While things are bad with all that, my chat is full of trolls and assholes. To make matters worse, my congenital bad luck leads me into stupid and dangerous situations all the time. For example: entering Harley Quinn's room and having relations with her while the Joker is nearby or kicking Darkseid in the balls... Maybe I'll get killed soon, but if not, I'll continue live-streaming the best content on social media... I just hope the system doesn't stream to strange places. If you want to read chapters in advance, be able to see the images that webnovel does not want and support me here I leave you my patreon. Patreon.com/_Aizen A/N: Hello, I hope you like this story and support it. English is not my native language, so I hope you don't mind the grammatical errors.

Mr_Aizen · Anime & Comics
4.1
557 Chs