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Rawaz
RawazLv33yr
2021-05-24 22:21

This fanfic is underrated .. it has really good Writing and has a lot of potential and I can’t seem to get bored of it but the only downside that I have To point out is that it doesn’t have consistant chapter updates ... overall it’s a great book with great characters and fun story and i hope the author updates It more regularly

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Yasashiki
YasashikiAuthor

Thank you for the support! When you wrote this review, I was in two pretty busy weeks so there was only one chapter each week. I said at the start that I would release at least one per week even if I am busy, and currently, I am back on making two/three a week. But I can’t give a schedule and be consistant, and I may never be since I have a life to take care of too.

Rawaz
RawazLv3

Understandable and I don’t blame you , it’s just rare to find a well written non cringe novel like this one and I hope you continue updating it, have a great day ❤️

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