ouch bro you hurting my feelings First of all, regarding the details about the sword appearing from nowhere, as well as the money that magically appeared, I would like to thank you for being so observant I personally admit, that my story lack in such details I bet my story, in your eyes, must be really worth shit for you to specifically take note of these immaculate details instead Clean shirt after going to the forest? Damn! Hey bro, lets talk about the rest of his body. How about his shoes? How about his pants? You know what? How about I make him go and take a nice, cool shower before he leaves the forest so that he can leave with a clean shirt Personally, I feel that some details could be left omitted. As long as they do not affect the flow of the story, or the plot, it is all fine. After all, will the MC die because he forget to remember that his shirt was supposed to be dirtied, and not clean? But after all that is said, I feel that your review, is still rather helpful for me, as it helps me identify my shortcomings. I will definitely focus on such details in the future I mean, it also helps me add some extra words into my story, doesn't it?

And as for the cliche part, thanks for pointing that out to me This is really helpful Hehe sometimes I wonder who is writing the story. Dang I spent a few hours writing this, and didn't realize that the plot I was using was commonly used Please educate me on which parts of my story is cliche, so that I can work on it in the future. Maybe you can even provide me with some suggestions, like how about you just make the MC rise up into the Heavens, destroying the entire Heavens in just one chapter No conflict, no cliche plots such as competitions, tests, examinations.

Damn I know that this sounds like a rant from a kid. But you see, I'm a novice writer, and the more I write, the more experienced I become. It's a learning process for me, right now And I offer you sincere thanks to your review They saw criticism makes you stronger This is my first obstacle I occur when writing, and I must admit that I felt rather furious when I saw this. Come on man, who won't feel angry after seeing the work that you spent hours on criticized, and turned into a book of worthless shit after a few sentences. Even though I'm only doing it as a pastime, but I kinda value things that I spend time to do.

I will value this comment in my heart This is the first critical blow I have received, after all Thinking from the positive site, your one review allowed me to take a step closer to having a rating on this book Previously, there were only 4, and now with yours, that makes 5 I sincerely thank you from the bottom of my heart, for this obstacle you have laid on my path, and giving me an opportunity to grow stronger, and better.

Damn My replies to your comment could almost make up one chapter of a novel

say* for 'saw' encountered* for 'occur' damn gramma mistakes messing up my flow

side* for 'site'

you have some "talent", I told you the truth so you don't waste time on that, good night friend.

a loli ... a cold queen .. a tsudere ... there are only female characters, and they are so cliches ... no harem .... (hahaha) the competitions and exams are not clichés (in fact they are, more are needed) also does not force the plot.

you don’t need to detail a scene, but you need the basics, your mc went to the forest in my perception with a sword art ... more without a sword, i just knew he had a sword when he said (i bought it on the way here ) me: with what money? where did he buy ?? what kind of sword? ....

but you omitted a lot, and made holes in your plot ... and how do you take 14 bodies of beasts in a bag ?? Ahahahah

oh so thats the cliche part your were referring to i just felt that it was more fun to write out the female characters first afterwards i'll go on with the male ones As for why their characters are as such, man I was thoroughly influenced when i was reading out those cultivation novels in the past

I was just going to move on after seeing this dudes review and not read this novel, but seeing your replies are grating to the eyes so i guess ill respond instead. So those swords appeared out of nowhere for no reason? Cmon im no writer but its so easy to just fit something into the plot to give an explanation, any explanation is better than just saying its a plothole. With you deciding to omit details, that makes the story first of all, seem too fast paced and also extremely unrealistic, sure you could start the novel with MC becoming the ruler of everything, but the reason people read novels is for the story, and minor things like that are a large part of it

Its good to realize your mistakes, most importantly, your first response when seeing critisicm shouldnt be to get defensive, but to instead take notes, because these reviews are a good way to get a measure on how the average person sees your book. for example, since this dude feels its really cliche, a lot of others probably feel the same way

Make unique characters, and i feel the best way to do that is to take a step back from their appearence and personality, but instead take the time to write out their motivations and hobbies and building the character around that instead, with the personality being next important, and appearence being the least