Firstly, I think I should point out that I am a lover of Avatar. It brings back nostalgia and I do have a slight bias to stories that make fan-fics from it lol. I'll explain my thoughts step-by-step: Book Cover: If it's one thing that I have learned while writing, it's that your book cover can be an essential part of attracting readers. So I would recommend the author to find a cover that works. Synopsis: Enough said. Given that it's a fanfic, not much needs to be said aside from the new character, Macai. So good job. Writing Quality: Very good. Very readable. Your grammar flows well with the premise of the story. If I were to mark you down, there isn't much that I could attack you for. The only issues I saw were with punctuation. Some sentences had unnecessary punctuation marks while others were missing needed punctuations. It's far from bad though. I'm sure readers can get through this book without complaining about grammar. Story Development: I'm loving it so far. I added it to my collections as something that I might read when bored. I liked how you at least gave a brief explanation about what the series of Avatar was initially about. I've seen fanfics that dive into the story thinking that the reader will be aware of the series the fanfic is writing from. The truth is that though you'd expect most people to know what the Avatar is, not everyone will. So I liked that you gave a little information so that readers who have no idea what the Avatar is about will have a better idea of it so they can understand your story better. Character Design: Quite Stunning honestly. You can see where the author places effort into being descriptive. I could fluidly imagine the image that the author is trying to make the reader see. Very good descriptive writing. Keep it up, author! I won't comment on your updating stability since I'm not sure how often you update the book (Kinda forgot to look, and would be a pain to delete all of this just to check lol). I will say the same for World Background given that it's already established due to being taken from the Avatar. However, I will try to keep an eye out to see the changes you will/might make further down in the story. Overall, great job author! Full 5 from me and I think you deserve it. Keep up the good work! You've got talent!!
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Thanks, the story is also on the Avatar wiki. I have pictures, but I've been unable to upload any of them to Webnovel, maybe they're just too big. You can search "Avatar Macai's Journey" on google or bing and look for the wiki page to see the pictures. There are character pages that come with pages of the characters along with a "Avatar: Macai's Journey Characters" category which comes with images and bios of several characters from the series.
