A really new take on Avatar, seriously the characters have been developed so well that I was fully immersed in it. really good writing. waiting for more.

A very splendid fan fiction. The author has a good grasp of the language and the choice of words were accurate. A perk of being a native speaker and an avid fan of the Avatar series. This was a good take on the genre that was applaudable when it comes to the execution. Kudos and good luck!

Since at the time of my review, there was only one chapter. I cannot say much about the world or plot yet. Maybe at a later time when the author posts more chapters is when I can alter my review once more. However, I will say it is a bit difficult for me to imagine the world even from the prologue. Mainly due to the reason that I do not know Avatar that well, but even then, as a reader, I should be able to picture the world a bit more, so I would suggest adding more of the world rather than dialogue in the prologue. Grammar errors are few, yet I can still spot some misplaced commas and run-on sentences, which can be corrected. Last but not least, I found the flow to be somewhat stiff. The only advice I can give you is the vary the way you started your sentences. So instead of saying ‘Macai’, try using ‘he’ or ‘young boy’ to describe the mc. Hopefully my advice is helpful enough, and keep up the good work, Author !

A story filled with diverse and creative personalities, a tale of action and adventure. One that follows the leader of the 31st regiment, Macai, a firebender who wields white fire. Along with his allies which are the likes of Azula, Rosh, and Kett among others. Read as Macai grows up and shares a romantic interest in Azula. The execution of this story has improved from the beginning, and I am proud of the development of the writer and his story. Updates are quite constant, the worldbuilding has gotten better over time. This AU alone can enrich the reader in something new.

As fan fiction goes, this is well written and very compelling. It blends so well with the original to the point that it makes the readers think it’s part of it. Which right now, it very much is. Great work author!

Oh, wait! This is a fanfiction! I thought it was an original. My scoring will be higher than the one I made before! Sorry about that! Anyway, the story is nice when this is a fan fiction of the avatar! I really love the series, and you're exploring the world in the fire nation! (again, sorry for posting the previous review I made! I deleted that and made the rating higher for this!) the only thing that i'd like to point out is the dialogue tags. It is better to add dialogue tags instead of colons since you are making a novel, not a script. It helps readers know what they are doing and how are they telling those dialogues to the person they're talking. Besides that, kudos for the author!

Avatar story . You have my curiosity and now you have my attention. Great story. Give it read [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

Absolutely incredible story and superb writing ability. I will continue to be a fan and read!!! Brian Hanes is an icon. Do you have any other content I can support?

This book is awesome. The novel way developed than the original form itself. Such a great plot. Nice way of writing too. Good work, excellent plot. And top of that nice title too