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commander_pride_21Lv64yr
2020-11-18 00:28

honestly, at first the story looked promising and even though the grammar mistakes were annoying, I still enjoyed it very much. Now for the story itself, I discovered how much unrealistic the MC power growth is and here I'm talking about how he amassed power so easily and no one was able to notice. I mean how none of his brothers or even his father noticed how a sudden powerful organization appeared and didn't investigate it at all. you say that they're good at managing and rulling and yet they didn't do anything to face against MC since they're the antagonists of this story so far and you made it too easy for MC to gather everything at his hands. you even made his mother a huge bank where he can get money easily at any time and any place. Second, the development of the world itself. you said that there exist people who can fly with swords and people who can become Devine like existences around here and yet you didn't even show one person who can do that or even how does the supernatural powers exist. Is it because of Qi? do people cultivate or are they born with it or something? Also, if such people exist, how didn't the kingdoms use them so that they can wage wars using these people so that they can become the most powerful kingdom. So far, we only saw Normal people fight and not like those fantasy battles using techniques and Qi Third, MC new shit personality or should I say new MC(as you killed the previous one) Honestly, he's the main reason I hated the last few chapters and how he became. Honestly, character development wise, you were doing very good with each character you introduced and even the brothers and sister of MC were good enough for me and even the change of MC from heartless murderer to a good guy would've been awesome to read and would've made us happy but you throw that away like garbage just to create a stupid twist of the return of old personality. that made me really angry. finally, the thing I wanna talk about is how you suddenly made the enemy kingdom suddenly enter the province without MC or his organization discovering about it. you talked a thousand times about how he controlled the province and yet people easily infiltrated without him noticing anything at all. you also made this event so confusing with how bad your grammar in those chapters is and the bad change of POV that made it worse. In the end, I would like to say that first, the novel started good and showed great potential and even got me easily hooked and read more chapters but then it got worse and by the time I reached chapter 46, I hated it. please try your best to improve it

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mrCatAuthor

first of all my I am really sorry for making you read some shity novel... now the main thing- I never once said that people/martial artist fly on their sword, I said that martial artist do fly but like we seen in dramas where the are like jumping also, in chapter 45 I have written how enemy invaded the land, and it's was a one whole year planning done by the enemy to send it's soldier isndie Kuwon slolwy-slowly as a civilian and then attack when the province was flourishing with resources... also, about the main thing...his split personality... the only reason why I put this split personality in him is to make sure that the last battle or the ending of novel will look good and for tht ending, I need some really evil character...but if only you would have stick one or two chapters more you would have seen that mc is back to normal (spoiler) also if you cross chapter 50, you will then know the reason why I added supernatural tag on it and I know that I am not good when it comes to explaining world and other things and I am sorry for that... I am really happy that you have read my novel so far and pointed out my mistakes... in the future, I will keep these things in my mind and try to make something good and wrothy of your praise thank you for your precious review ❤️ I could have made some op mc with those cultivation theme, but I wanted to try my hands on something new where I could make my viewer feel angry, happy and smile with the ongoing story, like a drama type, but I guess I really fail hard still gonna continue the novel till the end and see you in other chapter? or in other novel thank you...

commander_pride_21Lv6

dude you did not fail. I like your novel and honestly, it's really good to read such story but because I hated new MC I felt angry and all. aside from that, if you want to fix grammar then u advice you to use grammarly app which can help you a lot. also, I will continue to read till the end to see what is going to happen and I'm sure that you said something about people who can fly with their swords existing. I will put a paragraph comment on it for you to see. nice novel

mrCat:first of all my I am really sorry for making you read some shity novel... now the main thing- I never once said that people/martial artist fly on their sword, I said that martial artist do fly but like we seen in dramas where the are like jumping also, in chapter 45 I have written how enemy invaded the land, and it's was a one whole year planning done by the enemy to send it's soldier isndie Kuwon slolwy-slowly as a civilian and then attack when the province was flourishing with resources... also, about the main thing...his split personality... the only reason why I put this split personality in him is to make sure that the last battle or the ending of novel will look good and for tht ending, I need some really evil character...but if only you would have stick one or two chapters more you would have seen that mc is back to normal (spoiler) also if you cross chapter 50, you will then know the reason why I added supernatural tag on it and I know that I am not good when it comes to explaining world and other things and I am sorry for that... I am really happy that you have read my novel so far and pointed out my mistakes... in the future, I will keep these things in my mind and try to make something good and wrothy of your praise thank you for your precious review ❤️ I could have made some op mc with those cultivation theme, but I wanted to try my hands on something new where I could make my viewer feel angry, happy and smile with the ongoing story, like a drama type, but I guess I really fail hard still gonna continue the novel till the end and see you in other chapter? or in other novel thank you...
mrCatAuthor

I am using Grammerly app but the free version only corects few mistakes, if I want to really make my novel free of mistakes then I need to buy the full version which is something I can't afford, so sorry 😅😅😅

commander_pride_21:dude you did not fail. I like your novel and honestly, it's really good to read such story but because I hated new MC I felt angry and all. aside from that, if you want to fix grammar then u advice you to use grammarly app which can help you a lot. also, I will continue to read till the end to see what is going to happen and I'm sure that you said something about people who can fly with their swords existing. I will put a paragraph comment on it for you to see. nice novel
God_Of_LazinessLv3

you can download a premium mod apk

mrCat:I am using Grammerly app but the free version only corects few mistakes, if I want to really make my novel free of mistakes then I need to buy the full version which is something I can't afford, so sorry 😅😅😅
mrCatAuthor

I didn't know that... I will look at it, thank you 😘

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