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Ukiyo7Lv44yr
2021-01-09 08:03

very good writing, the main character is interesting and not deplorable. the world is also complete and thought out, though the money thing is very questionable.

Race to The Throne

mrCat
3.6
338 Chs

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mrCat
mrCatAuthor

huh, I didn't reply to your review? sorry, thanks for taking your time and telling me your thoughts, I am still learning, so sorry for not thinking much about money system. thank you

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ThanatosGreekGod
ThanatosGreekGodLv14

haven’t read the book yet am about to start my journey but couldn’t you just do the classic and easy to remember 100 bronze coins= 1 silver coin 100 silver coins=1 gold coin 100 gold coins=1 white gold coin A room for 1 night at an inn might be like 10 bronze coins in the lower class areas

mrCat:huh, I didn't reply to your review? sorry, thanks for taking your time and telling me your thoughts, I am still learning, so sorry for not thinking much about money system. thank you
3yr
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mrCat
mrCatAuthor

that coin system came in my mind, but I wanted to create some big difference between a rich and poor so I made huge difference. It is my first time in drama tagged novel so I wanted to try few things, but I couldn't do much. Also, the novel is completed so can't change now. But yeah, in future novel or the one I am working on "The King of sullegar" I will make things easy to understand and your idea is really helpful. Thank you

ThanatosGreekGod:haven’t read the book yet am about to start my journey but couldn’t you just do the classic and easy to remember 100 bronze coins= 1 silver coin 100 silver coins=1 gold coin 100 gold coins=1 white gold coin A room for 1 night at an inn might be like 10 bronze coins in the lower class areas
3yr
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