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FujiCigarette
FujiCigaretteLv53yr
2021-02-22 05:43

Just bad man.. read a lot of chapters and the writing quality instead of getting better got worse and worse.. Machine translated novels can be read way easier. You can see from from the first glance that the author never proofread his work, not because the grammar is bad.. but because of lots and lota of spelling mistakes and repeated words. Man i did not have a good time reading this

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