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zPray
zPrayLv44yr
2020-11-05 02:10

Very good,but has several defects 20 chapters and I don't even know the appearance of the MC and also the relationships with the characters in the story and none even with the parents, with almost no dialogue

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The_High_Father
The_High_FatherAuthor

huh? well, i didn't described the mc because i wanted the readers to use their imagination. he is Friend with heimdall, sif, Brynhildr, and odin sees him as an interesting asgardian.

Kokushibou
KokushibouLv4

You should describe him, that's your "job" not ours.

The_High_Father:huh? well, i didn't described the mc because i wanted the readers to use their imagination. he is Friend with heimdall, sif, Brynhildr, and odin sees him as an interesting asgardian.
The_High_Father
The_High_FatherAuthor

i don't have to job!🙃

Kokushibou:You should describe him, that's your "job" not ours.
Kokushibou
KokushibouLv4

"I don't have to job" okay? I don't know what you wanted to say with this, but why is it so hard to describe the mc? This is not Wattpad.

The_High_Father:i don't have to job!🙃
Kokushibou
KokushibouLv4

Btw, i recommend changing the title from "marvel: a God's journey" to "Marvel: A God's Journey" it look's way better that way, atleast imo.

The_High_Father:i don't have to job!🙃
The_High_Father
The_High_FatherAuthor

i didn't have opportunity

Kokushibou:"I don't have to job" okay? I don't know what you wanted to say with this, but why is it so hard to describe the mc? This is not Wattpad.
The_High_Father
The_High_FatherAuthor

ok

Kokushibou:Btw, i recommend changing the title from "marvel: a God's journey" to "Marvel: A God's Journey" it look's way better that way, atleast imo.
zPray
zPrayLv4

what? why don’t you want us to use your imagination? you’re talking about taking away one of the main reasons a person reads. one suggestion is that you start writing chapters of other characters’s visions to give a better view of how people close to him see him

The_High_Father:huh? well, i didn't described the mc because i wanted the readers to use their imagination. he is Friend with heimdall, sif, Brynhildr, and odin sees him as an interesting asgardian.
The_High_Father
The_High_FatherAuthor

maybe...i will write a character chapter

zPray:what? why don’t you want us to use your imagination? you’re talking about taking away one of the main reasons a person reads. one suggestion is that you start writing chapters of other characters’s visions to give a better view of how people close to him see him
Morgriff
MorgriffLv12

yeah the reader imagines characters, and not just the mc but all characters, however that imagining is usual based off of the description supplied by the author. my version of a woman described as being 6 ft tall with dusky skin, green eyes and dark black hair is going to be different than everyone else's.

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CanYouMakeItClear
CanYouMakeItClearLv12

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Lalalalal2424
Lalalalal2424Lv3

Read to chapter 57 (Serious Review): World Background (4stars) because it's fan-fiction...The writing Quality (4stars) is good but not the best I've seen but good, And the updates are frequent (5 stars) on that one, (3Stars) for Story development it's not bad but no great either, and for the grand finale and the rant I have been holding on for weeks (1STAR) FOR Character Design I would have given him (0Stars) if I could!! So MC is too much of a pussy getting suppressed left and right sometimes being powerful and other times not (that's how it felt to me at least) it felt like the author is trying to suppress his strength development as to not make him op but just fails miserably making him appear useless and just keeps acting like a kid, and he is too indecisive for my taste So I know the author wants to make it seem logical and act like real human beings but honestly, I am not here to read logical and real stuff am here to enjoy what little time I have to entertain my self I don't give a shit how real or logical it appears, that's why a lot of people like Chinese protags because they are not that annoying to read it gives you a sense of excitement and they are mostly decisive and act illogical even though you know they shouldn't act like that BUT people still read them As I said this is a novel...its fantasy...its purpose is to entertain...but what do I know this is your book and you are free to write it as you like some people may like this style...but I don't, those are just my though take from them what you want (if any) and improve yourself as to become a better writer Peace!

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