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Avan
AvanAuthor4yr
2020-12-22 08:41

Halo reader, i wrote this review after writing 70+ chapters and read hundreds of comments. So here is my honest review on my own work. 1. Its a slow start, i know the trending novel are currently a fireworks from the start. OP item or skill, etc. This one is a classic weak to strong novel. Even i dont really like the MC at the start. But i assure you it will change. 2. As much as it said historical, its not really true. It based on real world history but its still a fiction novel, so hope you enjoy the alternate earth. 3. The world and characters are the one i am confident with. i took a lot of time on them, but you can be the judge of that. 4. The grammer and writing stability should improve much from my last novel as i have more experience now. But please be forgiving if there still some mistake, as english is my second language. Please give the novel a try and hope you can enjoy the adventure of Emery and how he became the earth's greatest magus.

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ImaginationGalaxy
ImaginationGalaxyLv14

Its good! 👍🏻

Viviana_Amador
Viviana_AmadorLv1

I’m just trying to find out my

CanYouMakeItClear
CanYouMakeItClearLv12

my... what? Lmao

Viviana_Amador:I’m just trying to find out my
anime_watch_9852
anime_watch_9852Lv14

I am just waiting for more chapters plz.

DeVoided
DeVoidedLv15

Harem or otp?

Mars22
Mars22Lv13

Halo it looks very imtersting

DioisBAd4dM
DioisBAd4dMLv4

my what? goddamn cliffhangers!!!

Viviana_Amador:I’m just trying to find out my
Young_fruit_Smiley
Young_fruit_SmileyLv14

Hey author ....... will he have that struck up stupid & idiotic personality the whole time...?? if yes.... then I can't take it anymore, so I'll drop if no, then reply here... 🙏✌️

Avan
AvanAuthor

no. the title said the greatest right.. not idiot haha. thanks for the comment

Young_fruit_Smiley:Hey author ....... will he have that struck up stupid & idiotic personality the whole time...?? if yes.... then I can't take it anymore, so I'll drop if no, then reply here... 🙏✌️
Young_fruit_Smiley
Young_fruit_SmileyLv14

Well that's good then..... I like the story It's just his personality is bit(sigh*) If his personality is going to change as you said, then it's a plus👍 I'll see it to the end✌️ Good luck 🤞

Avan:no. the title said the greatest right.. not idiot haha. thanks for the comment
MadNoel
MadNoelLv10

Hey author, tks for your work. Please tell us if it is / there will be a Harem. I really dislike it and my personel feeling is that it gets the story to be displaced almost always. I also know that many people like it will be a plus for them. So, please reveal it for us. Ty

Avan
AvanAuthor

i honestly not sure. i dont like harem. but i do like having the mc surrounded by beautifull women. so even if there will be harem. it will be something where the character really connect

MadNoel:Hey author, tks for your work. Please tell us if it is / there will be a Harem. I really dislike it and my personel feeling is that it gets the story to be displaced almost always. I also know that many people like it will be a plus for them. So, please reveal it for us. Ty
Savage_0854
Savage_0854Lv1

where the discord link

Whymetho
WhymethoLv15

No to harem, unless its only up to 2 girls

Avan:i honestly not sure. i dont like harem. but i do like having the mc surrounded by beautifull women. so even if there will be harem. it will be something where the character really connect
Homelander69
Homelander69Lv13

hey author i don't like harem don't add it and i say don't add romace just single boy just like that hmmm and who comes destroyed

_Baka_turtle_
_Baka_turtle_Lv10

Sometimes Big harem are cringy even I dislike big harems. Well... author-nim its okay as long as there are 2 to 3 girls

Avan:i honestly not sure. i dont like harem. but i do like having the mc surrounded by beautifull women. so even if there will be harem. it will be something where the character really connect
Hussain_Khalifa
Hussain_KhalifaLv15

If its not harem, then please dont have him end up with gwen whatever her name is because im gonna riot. He is going to end up with klea kapeesh author?

Avan:i honestly not sure. i dont like harem. but i do like having the mc surrounded by beautifull women. so even if there will be harem. it will be something where the character really connect
Avan
AvanAuthor

Hussain_Khalifa:If its not harem, then please dont have him end up with gwen whatever her name is because im gonna riot. He is going to end up with klea kapeesh author?
Blacklotus
BlacklotusLv12

spelled grammar wrong hahahahahah

Zeuberg
ZeubergLv15

Hi author, I hope you'll respond to this question of mine. What made the MC different from the rest? What's his edge or what made him OP? Synopsis didnt mention any reincarnation/regression. Bookmarked the book but didnt start it yet, still have other books to finish. Ive been looking for mage MCs and hope this hits home.

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MonarchRavioli
MonarchRavioliLv15

Review after 868 chapters This is book is fantastic as a lover of history and fantasy this is a unique twist on the story of Merlin. I plan to use in this review the overall pacing, upload/community, grammer and punctuation. #1 Pacing: Personally believe that this book has some fantastic pacing, as a weak to strong genre it showcases a real struggle for Merlin, he has his ups ans his downs and we can feel his struggle throughout the book as he continues life gets that little easier and that little harder. Everything has a purpose and there are long payoffs for those who pay attention. If you like mythology and history, you'll pick up tid bits which you'll really enjoy, many moments left me in a case of picking my jaw from the floor. #2 Upload Schedule and Community Avans has a great upload schedule he releases very frequently with usually two a day which is great. He keeps to his promises in regards to bonus chapters for golden ticket ranking and overall ranking pushes. The community is one of the best I've ever encountered, everyone is kind and friendly and the author does monthly quiz's and voucher giveaways in which he personally runs and he's very active in the chat, watching us theorise while he watching with bated breath. #3 Grammar and Punctuation: Throughout the book there is very little in regards to problems, Avans is very on the ball, fixes where possible and everything is just as perfect as you can hope. So to summerize some Pros and Cons Pros World Building is, in a word, magical The magic system is very interesting and easy to understand. The use of Bloodlines is also very unique and special in regards to its use and importance. The pacing is just about right not to fast and not too slow Will leave you wanting more and you will grow with Emery on his journey Cons some of the characters can feel 2 dimensional to begin with but they become fleshed out as the story progresses Many find problems with the romance at the end of the day its not the main focus but its a tool towards Emerys emotional growth and its still important, plus we have fun debates. The cliffhangers are killer, they're great but I hate them. You won't regret reading this book I personally binged the first 110 chapters in one night. I'm sure you will too.

CanYouMakeItClear
CanYouMakeItClearLv12

(My Honest Review😁) The MC starts off slow and his progress in Magic is minimal, But, now that I think of it, I enjoyed it. The process of the MC's, little by little improvement, until he gets stronger, is a slow and enjoyable ride. It's like when you ride a Ferris Wheel and peek outside, seeing a great view, slowly and surely unfold on your eyes. It may be because of me being Fan of a slow start, not like most of the Novels here in WN, being fast-paced and OP. (A quick summary without leaking any major spoilers) Earth is not exactly the "Earth" we know, but an Earth with a slight tweak with some new species and special people. 85 BC Earth, so yeah. Let's start with the World Building… I'm speechless. Start with Earth, and he, the MC miraculously gets transported to a place where People would learn Magic. Emery is a Human, but not really, as his Mother being *spoiler*. The Kingdom is an enemy to Emery's mother Kind and when they know his secret, they chase him, getting his Father killed, and him miraculously escaping the chase, and miraculously got transported to Magus Academy. Magus Academy is a place or Holy Land of some sort for Mages. Emery is a rare Human who had 4 Elements for him to choose from, but his talent being B, the worst talent in his class. He needs to pass the test or his memory might be erased and be transported back to Earth, but getting back means Death for him. (Summary Ends) The thing I like about this Novel is the World Building or the description the author is putting for us to see. 5 stars World Building. I see that most of the readers didn't like how slow-paced the story is, but for me, it is perfect. 5 stars Story Development.  Writing Quality is 4.8 stars, because of some typos, but it will not affect your reading Tbh.  Update? Waiting… as there are some personal problems the Editor is facing, so the Author can't publish the Chapter. 4.5 stars...🙃 Character Design is 4.8. The People are flesh out fine, and you can clearly feel the emotions they want us to feel. But not that clear sometimes, or it is me just being dumb?🤣 Overall 4.8! Great Novel with a Huge Potential!  *The way I see it(chapter 36) The story's MC is like an MC who will, or most of the time be an underdog. So you guys must be patient!🤣 *Comment your thoughts🤣 or questions🤔

James_Schiavone
James_SchiavoneLv4
DeleTED
DeleTEDLv2

Here is my honest and detailed review: Personal opinion: This book is unique and I recommend it to everyone who likes to read about magic. I can already see character development in the future, unique magic spells and a lot more. This book is speaking to me. Telling me details without even reading about them. It's amazing. Writing Quality: I'm hungarian so I can't tell much.... That's what I would say about average novels with good writing style, but this novel is unique. Even I can tell that the writing quality is good. The author knows his/her way with the words. Story Development: A very good paced story. This is almost like magic to me. As if the author had all the time in the world to think about the story. Only 14 chapters and a lot of things happened, yet the story is not rushed at all. Character Design: It's really colorful. Author gave us almost enough character details. We can imagine the characters, but we can also depend on our minds. Every significant character got a personality here. Update Stability: Currently 7/week. Not the best, but it's not bad either. The novel is good so I'm already thankful. World Background: I can't say much about this one. It's interesting, a mix of imagination and real world. It's a bit hard to explain. Read the novel and you will understand. I won't say much because the novel only started 2 weeks ago. (Currently only 14 chapters. This an early review. I hope the author keeps up the good work. Also, I hope this review helped you understand a bit more about this novel.)

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