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Meow_theCat
Meow_theCatLv133yr
2021-03-17 03:01

It's difficult to read because of the dialogue. The grammar is not perfect, some repeativenes, the structure of the dialogue is awkward, and overall the content is childish. I had high expectations from the synopsis that sounded like an different and mature story.

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Ms_Anonymous
Ms_AnonymousLv5

Hey dear, Just like you I am reading this novel. But from the start. I would like to share my opinion on your criticism. First thing, we can see that the author is from India. Her mother tongue is not English but a different one. so, you can't expect her to give you perfect English. Which novel has perfect English, dear. There are many novels with much more worse grammar. Also, Where do you find childish? Maybe it's childish to you. this kind of novel was new in wn. Which author will write a story of a second woman? they would be afraid of attracting criticism. The author perfectly described how crazy the mc was. When a person was crazy she/he would do anything. they will become void of logic. Please respect the hard work of the author. a single negative comment or review can take their motivation away. 😇

Ninalizia_Johnson
Ninalizia_JohnsonLv10

just because they "will" do anything... doesn't mean they "should" do anything...

Ms_Anonymous:Hey dear, Just like you I am reading this novel. But from the start. I would like to share my opinion on your criticism. First thing, we can see that the author is from India. Her mother tongue is not English but a different one. so, you can't expect her to give you perfect English. Which novel has perfect English, dear. There are many novels with much more worse grammar. Also, Where do you find childish? Maybe it's childish to you. this kind of novel was new in wn. Which author will write a story of a second woman? they would be afraid of attracting criticism. The author perfectly described how crazy the mc was. When a person was crazy she/he would do anything. they will become void of logic. Please respect the hard work of the author. a single negative comment or review can take their motivation away. 😇
Little_Star_2201
Little_Star_2201Lv1

Here comes again the authors split personality!!🤦🏻‍♀️

lessy_brown
lessy_brownLv13

EXACTLY. Both are grown up adults not kids . They know right from wrong .They should be able to make there own decisions .If they wanted to fight for there love should have done before marrige . Why are people there day using the word LOVE to justify everything. In the end infidelity is infidelity .

Ninalizia_Johnson:just because they "will" do anything... doesn't mean they "should" do anything...
lessy_brown
lessy_brownLv13

EXACTLY. Both are grown up adults not kids . They know right from wrong .They should be able to make there own decisions .If they wanted to fight for there love should have done before marrige . Why are people there day using the word LOVE to justify everything. In the end infidelity is infidelity .

Ninalizia_Johnson:just because they "will" do anything... doesn't mean they "should" do anything...
PayalSinghRajput
PayalSinghRajputAuthor

I am so sorry if this novel offended you so badly. But, I just want to make a few things clear. This Novel is about a second woman who wants a someone else husband. True. But Do you know what her story is and what she is going through from the childhood? You never want to know her background or anything else. You are just focused on the cheating here and why she is snatching other woman's husband so Baldy? But do you know how the ML's Wife is? She is a woman who blackmailed the ML and married him.Just answer my one question. Is cheating wrong. I accept it. But don't you think, Blackmail is wrong to do to get a man in her life and make him forget his love with her cruel love? And another thing, Why do you think, The ML is listening to his father? They are getting blackmailed to all this. Just understand this that I know what is a wife position in a man's life and a lover position. I live in a society to has feelings too. A wife will be a wife and a lover will be a lover no matter what! It just... Situation makes them worst sometimes and not everything happens in a night or day. Everything needs time to settle down. But anyways, Thank you so much for your comments.They make me improve myself.

lessy_brown:EXACTLY. Both are grown up adults not kids . They know right from wrong .They should be able to make there own decisions .If they wanted to fight for there love should have done before marrige . Why are people there day using the word LOVE to justify everything. In the end infidelity is infidelity .
Little_Star_2201
Little_Star_2201Lv1

Totally agree wid u!

lessy_brown:EXACTLY. Both are grown up adults not kids . They know right from wrong .They should be able to make there own decisions .If they wanted to fight for there love should have done before marrige . Why are people there day using the word LOVE to justify everything. In the end infidelity is infidelity .
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