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KeCha
KeChaLv44yr
2021-02-16 03:11

I haven’t read too deeply into the novel yet but from the several chapters I’ve already read, I will say it’s not bad. However, as of now, I won’t be continuing and will lay this novel aside as there are too many grammatical errors and sentences honestly just don’t flow. You get what the characters are saying but with improper grammar, it makes the interactions between characters all the more childish. I highly suggest the author to get a editor if english is not his or her first language or just re-read the chapters if it’s just due to carelessness. Go for the first option though as at least half of each chapters don’t flow right.

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Ms_Anonymous
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Hey Dear, just read your review. You gave 4.6 ratings. Which meant you liked the story. As for the grammar, You know right? not everyone's first language is English. But the author is trying to improve her grammar too. She is also working hard with it. And as you said she hired an editor. they are editing all the chapters. But even the editor cannot edit all at a time, right? And no one would be careless with their work. Everyone wants to give their best for their work. If you like to drop the novel, it's ur wish. Your review may give a wrong opinion to the readers they may drop this book even without reading it.

Ninalizia_Johnson
Ninalizia_JohnsonLv10

I don't think it gives the wrong impression. 🤷🏽‍♀️ not everyone wants to read a story & have to read in-between the lines to figure out what's being said...

Ms_Anonymous:Hey Dear, just read your review. You gave 4.6 ratings. Which meant you liked the story. As for the grammar, You know right? not everyone's first language is English. But the author is trying to improve her grammar too. She is also working hard with it. And as you said she hired an editor. they are editing all the chapters. But even the editor cannot edit all at a time, right? And no one would be careless with their work. Everyone wants to give their best for their work. If you like to drop the novel, it's ur wish. Your review may give a wrong opinion to the readers they may drop this book even without reading it.
lessy_brown
lessy_brownLv13

Then dont keep a review section . It's for us readers to express our opinion 😑 We should have the right to say what we want as long as it's not misleading and offensive 🤷‍♀️

Ms_Anonymous:Hey Dear, just read your review. You gave 4.6 ratings. Which meant you liked the story. As for the grammar, You know right? not everyone's first language is English. But the author is trying to improve her grammar too. She is also working hard with it. And as you said she hired an editor. they are editing all the chapters. But even the editor cannot edit all at a time, right? And no one would be careless with their work. Everyone wants to give their best for their work. If you like to drop the novel, it's ur wish. Your review may give a wrong opinion to the readers they may drop this book even without reading it.
PayalSinghRajput
PayalSinghRajputAuthor

True. And I am not at all forcing any anyone to Continue the novel. Thank you for reading the novel so far.

Ninalizia_Johnson:I don't think it gives the wrong impression. 🤷🏽‍♀️ not everyone wants to read a story & have to read in-between the lines to figure out what's being said...
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sloppy_wet
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Evil_Duke
Evil_DukeLv1

Tbh, this is my first time writing a review for a contemporary romance novel. I haven't read many so there might be mistakes in my judgment. I started this novel not expecting much, but as I read till mid-way, I put all the thoughts behind my back and decided to stop it. Bcz, this novel doesn't suit my taste. Xavier, the ML, isn't that interesting of a character. He just accepts to marry some random woman his father choses. He isn't a nine-year-old kid that can't think for himself, right? He had Valentina who was his lover since high school or it says. Their bond isn't something that can't be easily broken by a third wheeler. Tears start streaming down his face for who knows how many times. Each line I read makes it more awkward and awkward. It would be better if the author uses other words to describe his pain. Reading the same lines doesn't help but irritate for someone like me. Letting these all slide, what surprised me the most is the wedding night which goes smoothly. Really smooth. I was taking time, keenly going through those lines expecting him to reject or something along those lines, but it still didn't happen to lead to disappointment. And the next day he goes to Valentina's office, telling her to break their relationship. I could go on and on explaining many things. But I'm really sleepy and most of it, tired now. In short, I appreciate the author for writing this novel. Don't take it to heart whatever I said. I just want to advise you to make it interesting for a fellow reader such as I, to read. It would be better if you increase the chapter length because everything I read could be sum into 200 words. Write something which makes the readers react and feel the emotions coursing through the characters. Not just plain one. I couldnt' give more stars and this is the maximum I could. Author, if you reply, type in lesser words bcz I can't read and understand quickly. Try to sum it up in 100 words if possible. That if, you reply. Author name is the same of a popular actress I know. I admire her a lot. Good luck!

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