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bibiyenini
bibiyeniniLv34yr
2020-10-27 20:11

Okay, this got me interesting from the start but you have your potential as a writer and you have this title impactful! Your story has this kind of confusion and thriller combined with that mystery of love or realism in it. It's really good actually! I have only one suggestion to keep the readers immense to your story. That is to give them a brief overview of what the novel is about. Your synopsis is kinda like a quote from the MC or a villain. Write two sentences with a wonderful premise in it so that it may click the readers in. I also write in that way back then, but I am saying this what I have learned. (Please, don't hate me). Lovelots, author!

How far would you go for a wish? (Ver.0)

D0l0s
4.6
10 Chs

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Any feedback is good feedback to me... unless it's something like "This shit sucks." In that case, I'll probably ask for a 5 mark answer on why the story sucks. Yeah, all I'm saying is thanks for the feedback.

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rebecca_ringdomsto
rebecca_ringdomstoLv1

Hey there! Good day for writing! If you want to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new works, you might want to contact rebecca.review@outlook.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters, or links will be appreciated when reaching out.

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micmicsellaaaa
micmicsellaaaaLv2

The introduction is nice! I just got confused about the description of the character and the surroundings but the plot is clear. I can see what you're trying to show in the first chap! Good job!

4yr
shaznalye06
shaznalye06Lv1

The work was great. The prologues happen to be interesting than I thought. The use of words was awesome and the book has great potential, Keep writing I'm sure you would be an awesome author! [img=update]

4yr
MyCatPaws
MyCatPawsLv3

It had me confused about what to feel... first it was warm and then the next it was depressing... your way with words did a roller coaster to my mind. I also find the starting prologues to be interesting and it keeps me in wonder what more if the story begins in the next chapters. Thanks and Good luck author 馃

4yr
TheSuccessor
TheSuccessorLv2

Quite one of a book, I thought it was sad, to me. And not because of the story, but because of the writing. The author gives a very sad and dark tone to the story, which makes me think it was sad. The feeling sad, not the bad one.

4yr
_inkheart_13
_inkheart_13Lv1

From the beginning chapters to the latest chapter had already grabbed my attention. Its background has me hooked. I can not wait to see what he happens next.

4yr
SUPER_WEIRDO
SUPER_WEIRDOLv15

From beginning until the latest chapter the book was attention grabbing. The writing style is great, as well... I also love how you make the "author notes" I actually took a look back in the second chapter again 馃槄馃槄. I am looking forward to seeing more chapters and seeing where everything goes. Keep it up.

4yr
raima_alam
raima_alamLv3

This story is great, I think you have great capability as a writer. I only read the prologue and found no errors. Keep up the good work and I honestly think this book should get more ratings.

4yr
ShadowPrincess96
ShadowPrincess96Lv4

Though it's only a prologue but your capacity as a writer is clearly visible鉂わ笍 I am sure this will be a potential novel indeed! I liked the start so much! Hope to get more good chapters coming soon 馃槉 Keep it up鉂わ笍鉂わ笍

4yr
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