I dropped this due to the horrendous writing quality. First, the beginning chapters have been the worst quality of the English language I have ever seen, even from novels that have been translated from another language. The author is constantly using lower level vocabulary, so there are many occasions where he could use a better synonym, or just word the sentence better. The author has also shown very poor use of the English language, starting sentences with "But" and poor use of conjunction words. Secondly, this is a blatant "inspired" novel from My Vampire System, but the author has inserted what I think are his own power fantasies into it. Thirdly, this is another complaint about the unbearable use of the English language in this novel. The Author is constantly overexplaining things that would be better to have readers infer into, such as living condition. I hope the Author does not delete bad reviews, because if so I've lost all my respect for him, because it's just a sign that shows bad character.
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First off, I have never deleted a review or comment in my life, second, I am well aware of my bad writing quality at the start of my novel as I started it on a whim and ended up continuing it. My writing quality greatly improves as the novel goes on. Thank you so much for you honest review, I don't know what I did to make you lose all of your respect for me 😔
I think he meant that 'IF' you delete his review THEN he will have no respect for you.
Oh, sorry lol, I must have misread it, thank you for pointing it out! I really appreciate it! 😅😊
man he was saying that if u do it proves how terrible your whiting is and making insults to u describing things which is what made several books famous
In my view, I did not insult him once, I made a review listing my opinions on this novel, which is what this function should be used for. I would appreciate it, if you can list novels that were made famous due to, poor use of the English language, and over explanation in situations where a readers inference would be better, such as living conditions.
he has never over detailed something
There is a literal example in my reply. We did not need to know the specificities of his living condition. The first few beginning chapters would've been done better if shown through the protagonist going through them and letting the reader infer, instead of the author "shoving it down the readers throat". Once again, I ask you to list the novels that were made famous due to the previous mentioned elements!
twighlight and it's amount of detail there vampire diaries which explained the background of its characters more then drip does there is cirque du freak theres the Harry Potter series all im saying is most books r popular because the authors spent so much time detailing stuff it the detail that makes it enjoyable we dont know the characters past we dont know what made them who they r and knowing this makes us want to see if things work out
I created a much larger reply, but the site messed up and it was deleted so I'm just gonna give you a quick summary. The author shoves too much info down the readers throat, the info is also presented in a pure narrative text, instead of like the introductory chapters of MVS, Quinn had actions that led to exposition, such as the introduction of the Daiki. For the living conditions, he gave us the exact numbers, completely unnecessary and most people don't know the exact size of 7 metres, so in most cases it would be better to say something like "Moby opened the door to his apartment. The apartment he was given from the government was sized similarly to a Japanese six mat room." You could definitely word it better, but I'm not an author so it's not my duty !
and it gets better after a few chapters and even I know what a meter is and I'm american
I think you should read my review, if you don't understand what I don't like about this novel ! I don't understand why you think this author does not deserve such a low review, and I do not understand why you think a 3.5 star review is bad ?
