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Teddy_910
Teddy_910Lv153yr
2021-04-14 17:31

Would this book be better if the first 7 to 10 chapters had a rewrite? Yes. Would this book be doing as well as it is if the book did not get significantly better afterwards? No. To you, the reader who is asking themselves "should I keep reading this mess of tenses and blatantly copied ideas from 'MVS'?" The answer is yes. Keep going. I almost dropped the book but am now quite a ways in and WOW it has been a pleasure to watch the author develop. As the story goes on, the grammar improves significantly, and copied ideas are few and far between, only appearing to appease plot holes that would otherwise appear. I believe that the only reason the beginning has not been torn out and replaced is because somehow, the author has managed to use such an unstable foundation for a book and return with a solid final product. Endure the beginning. It gets so much better.

The Great Demon System

Drip
4.5
455 Chs

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Drip
DripAuthor

Lol, yeah, you're right. I've already built upon the foundation so much that going back and changing it would be almost impossible. I honestly started this novel on a whim and never expected to get this far. It was almost a joke lol. But then I took it more seriously. Thank you so much for the review! I'm releasing a new novel very soon that will fix all the issues about the bad grammar and bad start that this one had and I'm really excited for it! ❤😊

3yr
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Goto_Beats
Goto_BeatsLv4

Please don't release novel after Novel ... Focus on one or two novel at Max ... See Author Legion ... He had published a single Novel .. Supreme Magus ... and continued to work on it ... it is the Best non System Novel in WebNovel currently ...

3yr
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Drip
DripAuthor

Of course lol, 2 books is my limit, don't worry! I'm not stupid lol, anyone who writes 3 more is mad man 🤣

Goto_Beats:Please don't release novel after Novel ... Focus on one or two novel at Max ... See Author Legion ... He had published a single Novel .. Supreme Magus ... and continued to work on it ... it is the Best non System Novel in WebNovel currently ...
3yr
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Phil_Kieselhorst
Phil_KieselhorstLv4

I really appreciate the character development. Though the drastic changes in the beginning with Moby though its explained, seems really fast. I would agree a rewrite to the beginning of the story would make it much better.

3yr
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Nevaeh_Grear
Nevaeh_GrearLv14

Nice

3yr
1
Nevaeh_Grear
Nevaeh_GrearLv14

Cool

3yr
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Mijael
MijaelLv12

in truth, what made me wonder whether to put the novel down or keep reading it, were super silly things like the names of the cities (from A to Z). the author fixes things like that later?

3yr
2
Teddy_910
Teddy_910Lv15

It does get better. I remember seeing the author saying that this book was originally just a joke before he started taking it seriously. But it's actually not awful. There's a lot of author growth in there as well. The fight scenes, torture scenes, romance scenes, and even classroom scenes all improve really fast as the author takes constructive criticism really well. Id totally give it a try.

Mijael:in truth, what made me wonder whether to put the novel down or keep reading it, were super silly things like the names of the cities (from A to Z). the author fixes things like that later?
3yr
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Nuwang
NuwangLv13

hey I mean begining after the end ripped off musoku tensai's begining. and look ay where it is now xD

3yr
1
Kerwin_Kantrud
Kerwin_KantrudLv15

Drop, you’ve got a gift. I love the demon system series. Please keep them coming. 😀

3yr
1
Robin_22
Robin_22Lv3

lol bruh no dont compare king grey with some pervert otaku

Nuwang:hey I mean begining after the end ripped off musoku tensai's begining. and look ay where it is now xD
3yr
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Nuwang
NuwangLv13

didn't grey and Tessa start dating when they where 13. I understand how it is different but tbate said before that he was largely inspired by moshoku tensai or atleast the begging was from what I remember.

Robin_22:lol bruh no dont compare king grey with some pervert otaku
3yr
Dominic_Davis_8300
Dominic_Davis_8300Lv15

this was my second book to start reading and still my favorite

2yr
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Drip
DripAuthor

IMPORTANT MESSAGE TO NEW READERS! PLEASE READ! My first few chapters' writing quality is very bad and lacklustre, as I was still a newbie at the time, but gets much better as the novel progresses! Also, the first 5 chaps can be frustrating (For a reason that is greatly hinted at) and are kinda similar to vamp system but the story and settings differentiate after that into their own thing past that point! I know my story isn't 100% perfect but there are at least some things to like about it! Hope you stick around! ❤️ No Harem too! I am part of anti-harem gang :D Harems add too much filler, something I absolutely don't want! I want substance in every chapter! Expect a little bit of romance but that will by no means be the main focus of the story. IF YOU ARE A VERY SENSITIVE PERSON THIS NOVEL IS NOT FOR YOU! The novel is also really gorry, the MC is a ruthless person who is not your generic protagonist and more of a gray anti-hero. He is really dumb at first but evolves into someone much smarter and more cunning! He is not world-breakingly OP and uses his brain to try to come out on top of any predicament he finds himself in. Sometimes the gore is harsh and other times it's funny so do expect that! I try to add comedy whenever I can in ways you may not expect or see coming! Thank you for reading this review! I hope you enjoy my novel! 😄

4yr

InHisName
InHisNameLv6

Felt Vampire System is too bland for your tastes? The protagonist just too righteous and naive for your tastes? Then welcome to the Great Demon System! The MC truly lives up to his name as a demon! Expect cruel domination, ruthless schemes, and abundance of brutality! Still need more details? The MC climbs up the hierarchy of demonhood, step by step on his path to becoming a Demon Lord...perhaps even Demon God. Each and every step is a struggle filled with blood, but you can rest assured this MC will survive his tribulations not through plot armour but through sheer willpower!

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Apostle_of_cthulhu
Apostle_of_cthulhuLv4

so far good mc not afraid to kill and torture some dudes for exp. Mc doesn't seem like a pussy or a wimp, but good level headed has moments where he ain't that but it brings depth to the character and so his emotions and how he is feeling cause not everyone is always level headed. His powers seem to be progressing well and him as a character seem to be evolving from his previous self and becoming more demonic wich is good.

4yr
CacackleLasson
CacackleLassonLv1

Reveal spoiler

4yr
Claire_Kingz
Claire_KingzLv3

So far this novel is great I love the torturing part more hehehe 😈not that am a psychopath....or maybe I am 🤔....well whatever the mc is so evil, he is not a bad person but he is to his enemies he shows them no mercy and his development is so smooth he is very cautious not to get caught by the academy and he has a little partner in crime hehehe😈 The mc is very smart and he isn't afraid of anyone......🙂 this novel is a bit better than "my vampire system" they might look similar at first but as the story goes it gets more different and more better....the MC's are totally different in character this novels mc is ruthless and that's what makes it fun 😁 But another difference is "my vampire system" updates more chapters😣 ahhhh so frustrating it will be nice if the author try to update more chapters pretty please 🙏😣 and I will keep supporting this novel.....great novel by the way I will recommend this to people 😘🤩

4yr
Hit1903
Hit1903Lv4

This is really bad story. Your Mc is trash. I mean who laughs after torturing someone. I could understand satisfaction but laughing is so cringy. And when I read that he let the girl die just to hide his ability, I gave up. I mean she was the first girl who showed some sympathy without even knowing his real powers. She is way above the first 2 girls of his group and he let her die. Again thi is is shit.

3yr
Cookie_the_lost
Cookie_the_lostLv15

Its revenge **** built on the vampire system thats so close that the only time it sidetracks is to have an anti hero that tortures people. I recommend the writer seek therapy because THIS IS VAMPIRE SYSTEM REVENGE PORN, SAME CONCEPT JUST WITH A ANTIHERO

3yr
kiddeath1998
kiddeath1998Lv15

This light novel my opinion is very bad. The beginning starts off horribly. How did it get to the top 10, I have no idea? The main character is unlikeable, Side characters are unlikeable the world itself is thought up to be a horrible mess. The novel needs a serious rewrite. The premise itself isn't even that original this light novel is slightly above-average. The times I can think of a story that starts off with will people beat me up and now I am starting to become a demon king. A LOT. What even makes it worse, is that it's not that different. Sure the best thing that you can say about this is that the reading quality isn't that bad, That's it!

3yr
Drip
DripAuthor

Shameless author here! I'm glad so many of you are enjoying my work! All of you are ones that motivate me to keep writing! Thank you all for your support!

4yr
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