Would this book be better if the first 7 to 10 chapters had a rewrite? Yes. Would this book be doing as well as it is if the book did not get significantly better afterwards? No. To you, the reader who is asking themselves "should I keep reading this mess of tenses and blatantly copied ideas from 'MVS'?" The answer is yes. Keep going. I almost dropped the book but am now quite a ways in and WOW it has been a pleasure to watch the author develop. As the story goes on, the grammar improves significantly, and copied ideas are few and far between, only appearing to appease plot holes that would otherwise appear. I believe that the only reason the beginning has not been torn out and replaced is because somehow, the author has managed to use such an unstable foundation for a book and return with a solid final product. Endure the beginning. It gets so much better.
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Lol, yeah, you're right. I've already built upon the foundation so much that going back and changing it would be almost impossible. I honestly started this novel on a whim and never expected to get this far. It was almost a joke lol. But then I took it more seriously. Thank you so much for the review! I'm releasing a new novel very soon that will fix all the issues about the bad grammar and bad start that this one had and I'm really excited for it! ❤😊
Please don't release novel after Novel ... Focus on one or two novel at Max ... See Author Legion ... He had published a single Novel .. Supreme Magus ... and continued to work on it ... it is the Best non System Novel in WebNovel currently ...
Of course lol, 2 books is my limit, don't worry! I'm not stupid lol, anyone who writes 3 more is mad man 🤣
I really appreciate the character development. Though the drastic changes in the beginning with Moby though its explained, seems really fast. I would agree a rewrite to the beginning of the story would make it much better.
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in truth, what made me wonder whether to put the novel down or keep reading it, were super silly things like the names of the cities (from A to Z). the author fixes things like that later?
It does get better. I remember seeing the author saying that this book was originally just a joke before he started taking it seriously. But it's actually not awful. There's a lot of author growth in there as well. The fight scenes, torture scenes, romance scenes, and even classroom scenes all improve really fast as the author takes constructive criticism really well. Id totally give it a try.
hey I mean begining after the end ripped off musoku tensai's begining. and look ay where it is now xD
Drop, you’ve got a gift. I love the demon system series. Please keep them coming. 😀
lol bruh no dont compare king grey with some pervert otaku
didn't grey and Tessa start dating when they where 13. I understand how it is different but tbate said before that he was largely inspired by moshoku tensai or atleast the begging was from what I remember.
this was my second book to start reading and still my favorite
