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Kystal88
Kystal88Lv24yr
2021-01-05 05:27

Overall a very interesting and good story. I can see where a couple of folks have left comments with suggestions for edits- they looked to be correct, and they'll make the story a little more polished. I enjoyed reading the prologue-type of introduction, and it really set up your story for success in the later chapters, very good use of that writing tactic. The characters' interactions are above average here on WN, and the suspense build up is perfect. Good job, and keep writing, dear author!

The Elusive Book Keeper

Dark_Scholars
4.7
360 Chs

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Dark_Scholars
Dark_ScholarsAuthor

Thanks! Followed their advice and roughly edited it☺

3yr
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JR_989
JR_989Lv15

Love this book tremendously so far. The main character is charming and plays cunningly with his smooth facade. The developing romance is endearing and the introduction in this magical world is well-developed. Definitely one of the gems in Webnovel!

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Amateur_Author
Amateur_AuthorLv5

Wow , we have similar beings in our mythology. This made me nostalgic as it reminded me of all mythological beings who are immortals. Thank you author. Keep up the good work.

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Maryixxx
MaryixxxLv4

Such an amazing and great novel of yours Author. I can't deny the fact that this one is interesting and at the same time a refreshing story for readers. Keep writing, Author. Can't wait for more chapters...

4yr
devilDestroyer22
devilDestroyer22Lv2

Interesting premise, however there are quite a few grammatical errors and punctuation errors. If you can polish your book it would turn the book even better. Otherwise good job!

4yr
JustLikeWriting777
JustLikeWriting777Lv1

I'll be honest here, this story is way more interesting than i thought it would be. I feel quite curious about the main character Zane and what's he up to. The plot really makes one want to know more! This book is definitely a keeper! I hope for you to write more as I will be waiting!

4yr
mahirakhaana
mahirakhaanaLv3

it's an awesome book👍😍but no update did the author drop it or something do tell if someone know 🤦

11mth
Cyclxne
CyclxneLv2

First off: Zane, cool name. I like it already lol. The MC's a bit interesting. He's definitely not a hero, but he's not really a villain (anti-hero) either. I haven't seen many MCs like this, so this was a fresh twist. The plot has really just began, but I want more chapters already! Keep it up, author!

3yr
Mikazuki_Sora
Mikazuki_SoraLv4

Hi! Your book is interesting. I'm looking forward to Zane's improvement in the story. But I want more updates. Don't stop here! Kudos to the author!!

3yr
CacackleLasson
CacackleLassonLv1

There is some good characterization on the characters, I think the plot will go to somewhere interesting. But in the first part there is a hefty amount of info dumping. It might be challenging for the light readers to read though. I think grammar needs some work but else good story.

4yr
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