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Yami_01
Yami_01Lv44yr
2020-07-28 18:41

I really enjoyed the story but starting needs to be edited I guess only from my point of view but after that story keep getting more interesting and I really enjoyed MC felling all emotion even if he didn't want to and MC is not too Op so good for story to progress and the changes in the story did the trick and best of all good work for giving mass release I really read for 2 days straight. Thank You Author San.

Douluo Dalu: Path of Immortal.

Greymark
3.5
77 Chs

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Greymark
GreymarkAuthor

Edited in what way? Grammar or add some more explanations about his choices/cultivation/things around?

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Yami_01
Yami_01Lv4

Hey there really is no one to talk other than system and it becomes boring just reading lines but it is my POV it only needed to be in 3 chapters max and could have started travel to mainland. But you really did very well in the story so its your choice, Thanks again for your all hard work.

Greymark:Edited in what way? Grammar or add some more explanations about his choices/cultivation/things around?
4yr
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LiaFeil
LiaFeilLv4

Well, I've never given 2 reviews for one novel. this is my first time doing it. As I said before, at the beginning, this story is good, then in the middle, it becomes like an unreasonable and forced rubbish, then in the end (ch58) it gets better (but still feels a bit absurd and forced which may be ignored). So my assessment for this novel is, if you can survive many unreasonable and forced things at the beginning of the story, you will find something good and interesting later.

4yr

Greymark
GreymarkAuthor

Reveal spoiler

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LiaFeil
LiaFeilLv4

This was good in the beginning, but after a few chapters, everything started to feel strange, absurd and forced ... Especially in the arc Spirit hall move ... or maybe when he went to a human city for the first time ... Honestly, that very bad ... At least in my opinion ...

4yr
DivinDragonEmperor
DivinDragonEmperorLv5

this is an AU of the famous douluo dalu/soul land. it's an AU of the first one i.e Tang San, the author has clearly thought out and planned what to write which is reflected in the quality of the chapters, flow of the novel and future plot. the mc isn't a side character and has his own adventures, he isn't weak like tang san and is actually abnormal for his age. the author has also added different elements and things which weren't present in the original novel like demons, spirit beast clans and 9 guardian/legacy spirit beasts.

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skulputulurubug
skulputulurubugLv14

Okay... Author clarified that first 30 chapters are brainless stupid senseless utter garbage that will make sense later on... but I can literally feel my brain melting right now... 20 chapters in and I ask myself why use Soul land when you add stupid demons and random bull ****... I like fanfics that expand the world and don't revolve around OG mc but this demons crap is just ****ting all over the original work you could've expanded your powers differently have hidden sects another continent ffs but demons crap... that only your mc a 3 year old orphan and intellectual beasts were able to discover? And the only other humans who know are slaves? Why didn't you just make an original work ffs... I really need to rant cause the 21 chapters I read are so fucking stupid

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ClearSkySage
ClearSkySageLv4

loved this one man, I am a huge fan of Duoluo Dalu so any fanfic is generally welcome but this one has such a great story and quality I just hope you explore more the higher realms this is the one thing that I felt lacking about the original I want more things about the realm of gods and above.

4yr
LaurentCross
LaurentCrossLv13

Story was really good up to chapter 20 then it went completely downhill everything felt forced and It wasn't entertaining or good I honestly tried to continue but ending up dropping at chapter 32. Especially how he dosent seek revenge pisses me off total buzzkill you honestly made your mc a generic nice guy wich ruined it for me.

4yr
1LiQiYe1
1LiQiYe1Lv10

"Mc is op but will have op enemies". I hope you won't make everyone op just because the mc is op. I read a fanfiction once where he made the mc op so he made everyone else op which completely ruined the point in making the mc op.

4yr
Areader001
Areader001Lv1

A you poor ****, you just have to create stupid things and now you agitated a certain reader. I'm not so sorry though, this thing you created is just nasty and not good. You don't know how to write so stop writing. Retard

4yr
Phoenix_Paradise
Phoenix_ParadiseLv5

Reveal spoiler

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