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MacGillavry
MacGillavryLv114yr
2020-07-14 11:19

Dude. Love the premise so far. It’s actually fun. If you continue with this, I would suggest delving into the mystery of how he became self-aware, if there’s some higher power or fluke in the system behind it, or just develop the character in his journey of self-discovery. There’s so many things you can do with this. But you also gotta explain the chicken. What does it do, exactly? Tell us!

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SquareGoat
SquareGoatAuthor

im already writing about the chicken for chapter 2, posting in a couple of hours cuz im a slow writer

MacGillavry
MacGillavryLv11

Noice

ShibaTatsuya786
ShibaTatsuya786Lv11

Probably just a fluke

Crimson_Assassin
Crimson_AssassinLv12

I swear I see you everywhere

ShibaTatsuya786:Probably just a fluke
ShibaTatsuya786
ShibaTatsuya786Lv11

Maybe we have the same taste in novels

Crimson_Assassin:I swear I see you everywhere
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EmzByte13
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Holy shít, this novel is great! Of course, nothing is perfect (and that's why I'm giving it just over 4 stars) but this book is damn close. I suppose I'll write a fully-fledged review, so here we go! : Writing quality- I haven't really noticed anything wrong with it. If there's typos, or grammatical errors, I certainly haven't seen them but if I'm honest, I'm not a very observant person. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ The story also flows nicely, and it's written quite well. Not to mention the humour in this novel is right up my alley, as in my opinion the only thing funnier than dark humor is straightforward, trying-to-be-serious-and-not-at-the-same-time humour. I dunno how it works, but it does, and I think I've laughed at almost every single chapter. I've also cried, and have been left speechless on many occasions. It's been a héll of a ride so far, that's for sure! Story development- Now, this is an area that I did have one or two minor problems with. We were warned that there was no particular plan for this novel, but oh man, sometimes I felt that the story could be going anywhere. Of course, it isn't cliché, and that's wonderful (beyond wonderful, actually. It's refreshing) but I just felt like some things in the novel just didn't matter as they were arbitrarily decided and came out of nowhere sometimes- and that feeling of detachment isn't so wonderful. Other than that... it's been fantastic so far! Character design- Oh man, where do I start? I think Bob is one of the best MC's I've ever read about. He's an idiot with a chicken, a naive, poor, hapless, gullible, but loveable idiot with a chicken. If I was Christian, I would say 'God help his soul', but I'm not, so, yeah... And it's not only Bob and his chicken (at this point, they're a package deal- it doesn't feel right to mention one without the other), I think I've actually liked every single character that has been introduced thus far (ch 69, and there have been quite a few characters!) and that's only happened at most 4/5 times in the 7 or so years I've been reading all sorts of novels... Updating stability- Well, I've read all the chapters that were already here, so I can't say anything about the updating stability. There did seem to be a couple of bumps based off of the 'author's thoughts' bits, so I had to deduct one star of this category for that. World background- Ahh, what can I say... It's been slowly but steadily revealed as we go along, in a rather smooth way might I add. The place names have been hilarious, much like the rest of the story, and somehow the author has made everything plausible and detailed. To sum it up, I don't think I'll ever be able to type enough praise for this novel, so I'll try and condense all of it into one thumbs-up emoji: 👍 (I hope you can see all the sincerity. 😅) I'm looking forward to see how this story, the characters and the world itself develop, and while I'm waiting for a fúck-ton of chapters to be released, I'll see if the author's written anything else!

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