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ParagonBonemancer
ParagonBonemancerLv134yr
2020-11-23 10:15

this got high ratings so i tried it. pretty good concept, but why do you have info dumps in every chapter? first 12 chapters and what do we got? yes you keep saying that you're a beginner writer BUT you could've learned from your predecessors right? chapters are short. At the end of some chapters you said they're a long one, but that's just because of the info dumps. dang there's even a chapter where he only change clothes and inform us his favorite color which is red and black . and don't you try delete this review . already skimmed those chapters up to 60+ but still, can't really bring myself to read this one. anyways, nice try and learn more.

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Neil_Ads
Neil_AdsAuthor

why should I delete this review? you can literally see on the review section that I don't delete reviews, aside from spam of course. If that's what you think about my novel then so be it. You're pretty aggressive, sorry, I don't have any cure for that.

ParagonBonemancer
ParagonBonemancerLv13

I'm not being aggressive. I'm just being frank and it's your improvement which can be the cure

Neil_Ads
Neil_AdsAuthor

I don't want to cure that, blehh.

ParagonBonemancer:I'm not being aggressive. I'm just being frank and it's your improvement which can be the cure
cameron_scears
cameron_scearsLv1

hey Neil nice novel BTW I wanted to ask i just started reading will there be powers the mc can get from the system

Neil_Ads:why should I delete this review? you can literally see on the review section that I don't delete reviews, aside from spam of course. If that's what you think about my novel then so be it. You're pretty aggressive, sorry, I don't have any cure for that.
Neil_Ads
Neil_AdsAuthor

none so far, aside from some body strengthening that is due to the apocalypse viruses. If talents are included then, he do gained some talent from the system.

cameron_scears:hey Neil nice novel BTW I wanted to ask i just started reading will there be powers the mc can get from the system
Melshan
MelshanLv7

The MC Will have a girlfriend/wife?

Neil_Ads:none so far, aside from some body strengthening that is due to the apocalypse viruses. If talents are included then, he do gained some talent from the system.
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Into the Zombie World is a book of fiction written by Neil_Ads. The story revolves around a man named Nile who sought to survive a zombie apocalypse after his untimely death by being bumped by a truck. The author uses present-tense. Well, it is a good story. Personally, what I love about the book is Nile's intelligence and the way he reacts to certain things. He thinks logically, making the right choice except for the store as he could've looted the first three houses instead of choosing the store. I love his plans and schemes to get rid off or defeat zombies. I think there is a mixture of futuristic technology since there is this so called system that displays certain things. I'm not used to reading these kind of novel mixtures. Anyway, the grammar and punctuation is definitely one thing the author must improve. Yes, it uses present-tense but because of this, it seems more like a guy telling actions rather than a describing and story-telling. He is walking, He is going, he is banging, things like that should be changed. Because of this, it lacks emotions and some elements of a horror novel. You could describe the zombies more rather than using Big, small, fat, or sharp teeth. I didn't feel any suspense except for the parts in which the dialogues weren't aplenty. I would like to suggest that you describe things like this: Example: His leg were trembling. Try going to the next level: His legs were noodles. Or to add more suspense and frightening elements, I would suggest: Example: The silence shrouded his mind. (Lacks emotions) "Once the quietness arrived, it stayed and spread in Estha. It reached out of his head and enfolded him in its swampy arms…sent its stealthy, suckered tentacles inching along the insides of his skull, hoovering the knolls and dells of his memory, dislodging old sentences, whisking them off the tip of his tongue." Something like that. Well, I hope this honest criticism helped out!

Daoist_Red_Reads
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Keep in mind that I just gave up at around chapter 40. I will try to explain my ratings I am ok with the different buildings as long as there is a comparison. And I am sure alot are alright with it. I usually just dismiss those as fantasy buildings when the info dumps comes in and finally, since I am a filipino, am alright once there are no info dumps. The reason as to why I rated it 4 is the over explaining things. Like memory and even a katana; the katana was even described with different words, 5 of them in fact. The info dumps are too much. It is nice to have info dumps but there is just too many. In the whole 40 chapters, it felt like more than half of those chapters are info dumps, unnecessary infodumps even. The main character is fine up until his attitude turned 180. The character is good and is not provoked easily, later on he saved a group of people then after that he found another group of people. Those guys just warned him not to go there, there was no reason for conflict but then the main character fights the group cause he didn't like what he said 😒. He is pretty generic to me so I wanted it at 4 but that attitude change reminded me of the other powerfantasy novels with horrible plot like space martial god. Which really just soured my experience so this review might be a little lower than like a -0.1 in ratings than the one I had in mind. The world is explained in an annoying way. Could have kept some mystery but decided to just push many of it's secret out. Other than that not that bad so 3. I could have made it 4 or 5 but those info dumps destroyed the atmostsphere of the world for me. Overall rating is 3.7 for me but due to my biased judgement. -0.1 which makes it 3.6. Maybe it gets better but I just don't have the patience to read novels like these anymore.

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