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SaxonViolence
SaxonViolenceLv64yr
2020-08-30 03:25

This story was rather rickety to begin with. It is random and filled with ham-handed Information Dumps. The Protagonist is an Idiot. I tried hard to hang in there despite the roughness of the story, because at the end of the day, I just like Zombie Stories. It was kinda weird when the protagonist got orgasmic feelings from probing Zombie brains with his finger…EE…The breaking point was when the Protagonist DIDN'T WANT to look muscular and buff. I get more tired of this Fetish against manly physiques in these stories EVERY TIME I ENCOUNTER IT. Damned Nation! You can't argue that someone like Bolo Yeung is slow and awkward—or grotesque. I guess having a manly physique ruins one's cross-dressing.

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Neil_Ads
Neil_AdsAuthor

Yes, this was rash to begin with. No future plans at all. I write what comes to my mind during every chapter. About the orgasmic feeling, sigh* I was confused too why I write it that way. About the buff body, I don't know. Maybe it will evolve to something like that in the future. Thanks for reading anyways. And just like you, I am also a big fan of zombie novels. Apocalypse Meltdown System hit me really hard. That was actually the reason too why I decided write this novel on the get go.

PhilVictorovich
PhilVictorovichLv4

Apocalypse Meltdown is one of the best novels of this genre for sure, a pity it was dropped. Glad to know you're a fan of it as well, mind describing the MC of your story though? Cold, Naive, Hero, Anti-hero, Evil, Neutral...etc ? Thank you in advance.

Neil_Ads:Yes, this was rash to begin with. No future plans at all. I write what comes to my mind during every chapter. About the orgasmic feeling, sigh* I was confused too why I write it that way. About the buff body, I don't know. Maybe it will evolve to something like that in the future. Thanks for reading anyways. And just like you, I am also a big fan of zombie novels. Apocalypse Meltdown System hit me really hard. That was actually the reason too why I decided write this novel on the get go.
Neil_Ads
Neil_AdsAuthor

all of the above.

PhilVictorovich:Apocalypse Meltdown is one of the best novels of this genre for sure, a pity it was dropped. Glad to know you're a fan of it as well, mind describing the MC of your story though? Cold, Naive, Hero, Anti-hero, Evil, Neutral...etc ? Thank you in advance.
PhilVictorovich
PhilVictorovichLv4

Unless your MC has multiple personality disorder that's just not possible.

Neil_Ads:all of the above.
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Dann_Giovanni
Dann_GiovanniLv1

Into the Zombie World is a book of fiction written by Neil_Ads. The story revolves around a man named Nile who sought to survive a zombie apocalypse after his untimely death by being bumped by a truck. The author uses present-tense. Well, it is a good story. Personally, what I love about the book is Nile's intelligence and the way he reacts to certain things. He thinks logically, making the right choice except for the store as he could've looted the first three houses instead of choosing the store. I love his plans and schemes to get rid off or defeat zombies. I think there is a mixture of futuristic technology since there is this so called system that displays certain things. I'm not used to reading these kind of novel mixtures. Anyway, the grammar and punctuation is definitely one thing the author must improve. Yes, it uses present-tense but because of this, it seems more like a guy telling actions rather than a describing and story-telling. He is walking, He is going, he is banging, things like that should be changed. Because of this, it lacks emotions and some elements of a horror novel. You could describe the zombies more rather than using Big, small, fat, or sharp teeth. I didn't feel any suspense except for the parts in which the dialogues weren't aplenty. I would like to suggest that you describe things like this: Example: His leg were trembling. Try going to the next level: His legs were noodles. Or to add more suspense and frightening elements, I would suggest: Example: The silence shrouded his mind. (Lacks emotions) "Once the quietness arrived, it stayed and spread in Estha. It reached out of his head and enfolded him in its swampy arms…sent its stealthy, suckered tentacles inching along the insides of his skull, hoovering the knolls and dells of his memory, dislodging old sentences, whisking them off the tip of his tongue." Something like that. Well, I hope this honest criticism helped out!

Daoist_Red_Reads
Daoist_Red_ReadsLv4

Keep in mind that I just gave up at around chapter 40. I will try to explain my ratings I am ok with the different buildings as long as there is a comparison. And I am sure alot are alright with it. I usually just dismiss those as fantasy buildings when the info dumps comes in and finally, since I am a filipino, am alright once there are no info dumps. The reason as to why I rated it 4 is the over explaining things. Like memory and even a katana; the katana was even described with different words, 5 of them in fact. The info dumps are too much. It is nice to have info dumps but there is just too many. In the whole 40 chapters, it felt like more than half of those chapters are info dumps, unnecessary infodumps even. The main character is fine up until his attitude turned 180. The character is good and is not provoked easily, later on he saved a group of people then after that he found another group of people. Those guys just warned him not to go there, there was no reason for conflict but then the main character fights the group cause he didn't like what he said 😒. He is pretty generic to me so I wanted it at 4 but that attitude change reminded me of the other powerfantasy novels with horrible plot like space martial god. Which really just soured my experience so this review might be a little lower than like a -0.1 in ratings than the one I had in mind. The world is explained in an annoying way. Could have kept some mystery but decided to just push many of it's secret out. Other than that not that bad so 3. I could have made it 4 or 5 but those info dumps destroyed the atmostsphere of the world for me. Overall rating is 3.7 for me but due to my biased judgement. -0.1 which makes it 3.6. Maybe it gets better but I just don't have the patience to read novels like these anymore.

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