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OnionRerouted
OnionReroutedLv154yr
2021-04-02 06:32

I'll give 4 stars on everything simply because you're an original author, and your book has potential, however, Mark's arrogant internal monologue just ended up giving me a headache, his character that didn't fit the descriptions you gave at the start made him even more annoying to the point where I had to give up at the end of the rooftop chapter, and just skim read ahead to at least give a reasonable review... the main things that led to my problems with Mark are that quite simply, nothing about him makes sense, he's unusually handsome yet apparently is massively depressed, self confidence is extremely important in making someone seem attractive... the man was seriously considering suicide, I get him wanting to live because the zombie apocalypse is fascinating, but if that's the case, he'd either entirely forget his desire to die, or spend some time coming to terms with it, not mention it every few minutes for you to seemingly, bolster your word count, which is honestly what the first chapters felt like... then, there's his arrogance that seems to shine through when speaking to the woman that saved his life because he stupidly said he wanted to fight some zombies, then decided to run around a sofa instead, while still acting like he's freaking action man, and seemingly, no-one even blinked an eye to it... the hints at him being a gamer in the first chapter seemed really important, then his actions didn't even slightly follow that trend, a gamer would come to terms with there being zombies fast, sure, but there are other important things they'd remember too, like if there's a corpse twitching on the ground, stab it in the head, they wouldn't just loot first, and let the zombie turn in the same room as them...

THE END OF LIFE

Cruchymonster
4.7
178 Chs

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Cruchymonster
CruchymonsterAuthor

thanks for the review tho. but I made him arrogant? his character is slowly revealed as you read through many peeps get confused and drop it but it's ok. thanks for trying it out atleast

4yr
OnionRerouted
OnionReroutedLv15

it comes across as arrogance when he keeps hinting inside his own head, that everyone else is a burden, hell, didn't he actually say it, just after Mona saved him from becoming zombie food? I get that character development is necessary, but he just feels so conflictual with himself... you're welcome, original work always deserves a review, best of luck with the future chapters, and thanks for putting in the effort to make the story :)

Cruchymonster:thanks for the review tho. but I made him arrogant? his character is slowly revealed as you read through many peeps get confused and drop it but it's ok. thanks for trying it out atleast
4yr
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Cruchymonster
CruchymonsterAuthor

thanks for being a productive reviewer. always helpful

OnionRerouted:it comes across as arrogance when he keeps hinting inside his own head, that everyone else is a burden, hell, didn't he actually say it, just after Mona saved him from becoming zombie food? I get that character development is necessary, but he just feels so conflictual with himself... you're welcome, original work always deserves a review, best of luck with the future chapters, and thanks for putting in the effort to make the story :)
4yr
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SKYoupley
SKYoupleyLv14

question btw are you no longer doing the baseball novel ?

Cruchymonster:thanks for being a productive reviewer. always helpful
4yr
Cruchymonster
CruchymonsterAuthor

no plans for now atleast this yr cause I'm coming out with another spirity entry this weekend. I have things planned out for the sports novel but just no time with my studies and other stuff. sry man probably next yr if things go according to how I planned it

SKYoupley:question btw are you no longer doing the baseball novel ?
4yr
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An awesome zombie story, Mark is an amazing, down to earth character, and I look forward to seeing him survive this apocalypse! As well as making his mark on the world!

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Yes a self review of 5 stars by this author. I try to on my own pace and try to release atleast one chapter everyday. I like to increase or decrease the pace of the story depending on the moment of the characters. With a big background for the MC, he might be a bit confusing in the beginning but will get clearer as time goes on.

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END IS HERE...oh I like that... author improved his grammar compared to his previous novel...and grammar mistakes are little to none. Nice starting, so far good. It's a type of novel which action mixed with lite gore(I am not of fan of it though). So far story is normal and no plottwists or something make it say wow. but it's nice novel. World background is same as modern so there's nothing to say but author writing about surroundings is good. Character development is nice and like that MC don't become douche bag after apocalypse started like mc in god and devil world. Hope that he won't become douchebag. Nice work author.

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Fatty_Cream
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Alright i read 20 chapters in, and yeah its quite solid especially with the author clarifying its their first rodeo i believe. Now its not without its faults, lets get the big hurdle out of the way, the main character is a big mary sue. Not really a spoiler as around 18 chapters in its revealed hes had "sword and gun training" and that he was " a genius" who quit because he found it boring. Not to mention his perfect figure and attractive features the first chapter in. Look, you can enjoy this for what it is especially when there is a lot worst, there are no overbearing cliches here. Well aside from Mr Perfect MC. He does struggle but at a superficial level. Also minor gripe, his actions and thoughts being somewhat contradictory? He thinks others are a burden while risking his hide for an inhaler, that isnt to say human beings aren't flexible and contradictory in nature. So thats not really a major issue but i felt it should atleast be addressed. OH, lets talk about the only female 20 chapters in who's an office worker who coincidentally is a kendo three time championship who also coincidentally has a kantana sword becuase coincidentally it was her first day on the job... Idk it could happen but very unlikely and it just had me rolling my eyes E N ways thats about it. Have a good one.

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Aoalbjorn
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I will not read this novel since MC isn't solo. But I like how author describe the synopsis mentioning that it deosn't have Solo MC. good luck

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ThreeMilks875
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It’s a good book, but the grammar puts me off a bit. The MC is a Gary sue (super handsome, genius, fighting expert) and is contradictory so that’s kinda bad. I still like it, and would continue to read it if it got proofread.

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Umeki_Richardson
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I really enjoy reading these books it really helps and keep me from having to go to the store and search for books. Saves me a great amount of tinr

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Mark_D_Dragneel
Mark_D_DragneelLv5

The story is any different from other Apocalypse novels but grabs your attentions that should explain how well its written, The authors is able to hold your attention by suspence of what will happen next and what will be Mark's choice. Read atleast the first 15 chaps before you judge the book

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LiquidatedSteel
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Meh Feels like its going to fast the progression but hey its my opinion and you can read to make your own so have a nice day. You probably:

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i like this zombie book and i will definitely remember this once i get more coins and fast passes i look foward to reading your book and keep updating it.

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