Review Detail of LyingCrowPromises in Moonlight Kiss

The story has an interesting premise and it kept my attention. The story development is quite good, I like where it's going and wouldn't mind reading more. The things I have to say to the author: -Story development and world background are solid -Character design is good, but Carla seems too flat to me, although her actions don't show that, try to flesh her out better. We do see her aspirations and some of personality, but it's not conveyed in the best way -Writing quality: Please get an editor. You have grammatical mistakes, punctuation is problematic, misspelled words. English may not be your native language, but do try to make your writing better. Use grammarly and some other sites that will show you how it should be done. That's all from me. I liked the story and I DO think it's interesting and that it has lots of potential, but you can do even better. Fight on!