This story they you probably never find in naruto fanfiction because most other naruto fanfiction always have something to do with the hidden leaf and it gets boring because same thing prevent uchiha genocide, save sakumo, or prevent uzmaki village from getting destroyed. That why a fanfic like this because it bring a new perspective but hope become tailbesat holder and learn dust releases
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dont listen to him, this dude ignored major plot holes present in the story
Nonsense this is definitely worth the read if your for new type fanfiction; to be honest there where plot in the beginning but he clearing them as more chapter pass bye. Don't listen to the person who only read 6 chapters.
amaturewriter:dont listen to him, this dude ignored major plot holes present in the story
and dont listen to a person that ignore major mistakes that many many people pointed out
TwistedUExile:Nonsense this is definitely worth the read if your for new type fanfiction; to be honest there where plot in the beginning but he clearing them as more chapter pass bye. Don't listen to the person who only read 6 chapters.
It true he had many mistakes in the beginning and i give you credit for that, but you didn't even wait for the story to develop before wrote a horrible review instead you could commented and gave him some constructive criticism but you and many other decided to give him a bad review instead. My point is if you were really trying to help you would been reading the story and trying update your review but after you made your review you never came back to see how fix the plot holes. That why i said people shouldn't listen to you because even after coming twice to reply to me you still haven't read past chapter 6
amaturewriter:and dont listen to a person that ignore major mistakes that many many people pointed out
**: this bk has amazing potential, no doubt, so go tell author to re-write, or fix his mistakes, take a look at the flaws other people and mentioned and fix, if he does,bk would be dope,,,till then, all these mistakes just ruin it
TwistedUExile:It true he had many mistakes in the beginning and i give you credit for that, but you didn't even wait for the story to develop before wrote a horrible review instead you could commented and gave him some constructive criticism but you and many other decided to give him a bad review instead. My point is if you were really trying to help you would been reading the story and trying update your review but after you made your review you never came back to see how fix the plot holes. That why i said people shouldn't listen to you because even after coming twice to reply to me you still haven't read past chapter 6
what are the plot holes? i noticed some of them but not a few to where it is a big deal to get me to stop reading. To be honest as long as a fic isn't predictably cliche or just horrible writing with bad spelling i wouldcome back and review it
amaturewriter:**: this bk has amazing potential, no doubt, so go tell author to re-write, or fix his mistakes, take a look at the flaws other people and mentioned and fix, if he does,bk would be dope,,,till then, all these mistakes just ruin it
read reviews i guess
Choice_Username:what are the plot holes? i noticed some of them but not a few to where it is a big deal to get me to stop reading. To be honest as long as a fic isn't predictably cliche or just horrible writing with bad spelling i wouldcome back and review it
your talking about plot holes in the review but not bring up any, why?
amaturewriter:read reviews i guess
nope...no where in my review do I talk about plot holes....I simply stated everything I found wrong and stupid...its the first review
Choice_Username:your talking about plot holes in the review but not bring up any, why?
you're second comment
amaturewriter:nope...no where in my review do I talk about plot holes....I simply stated everything I found wrong and stupid...its the first review
MC parents powerful S ranks and the mother was close the kage and yet MC is raised in an orphanage? then the rich people that MC's parents saved and yet did nothing for MC when he was a kid
Choice_Username:you're second comment
naruto's parents were also S rank and a hokage, yet he lived in a orphanage for the same reason, not many people knew he was their son and same with the mc because not everybody knew she had a kid, why else do you think when she had the mc it was in a room filled with elders (that are dead so they can't take care of him either) and if you ask why the 3rd tsuchikage didn't adopt mc, the 3rd hokage didn't adopt naruto but you clearly kept watching it
amaturewriter:MC parents powerful S ranks and the mother was close the kage and yet MC is raised in an orphanage? then the rich people that MC's parents saved and yet did nothing for MC when he was a kid
I read first line and stopped...look at what u wrote...jesus,,,narutos parents were legend and a jinjuriki ....MC's parents were just ranks......related to kage...,,and dude u watched naruto? hokage couldnt adopt naruto cause he was jinjuriki,,u want to defend bk,,,use facts and logic,...dont say stupid ****
Choice_Username:naruto's parents were also S rank and a hokage, yet he lived in a orphanage for the same reason, not many people knew he was their son and same with the mc because not everybody knew she had a kid, why else do you think when she had the mc it was in a room filled with elders (that are dead so they can't take care of him either) and if you ask why the 3rd tsuchikage didn't adopt mc, the 3rd hokage didn't adopt naruto but you clearly kept watching it
that's your problem right there, your low attention span, exactly naruto's parents were also important but also a orphan your just proving my point and you're stupid if you think he couldn't take care of him because he was a jinjuriki becuase killer bee was still long when his dad died so A was taking care of him and he was a jinjuriki and most of the jinjuriki's that were born without parents had some kind of guardian. Hiruzen if the 3rd hokage and could have had anyone take care of naruto but you find a kid of a random s rank more likely to be treated better? do you even know what you are saying
amaturewriter:I read first line and stopped...look at what u wrote...jesus,,,narutos parents were legend and a jinjuriki ....MC's parents were just ranks......related to kage...,,and dude u watched naruto? hokage couldnt adopt naruto cause he was jinjuriki,,u want to defend bk,,,use facts and logic,...dont say stupid ****
jesus the author spent the first part of the first chp showing relationship with family and onoki...MC insnt a random kid,,,before u argue go read the bk
Choice_Username:that's your problem right there, your low attention span, exactly naruto's parents were also important but also a orphan your just proving my point and you're stupid if you think he couldn't take care of him because he was a jinjuriki becuase killer bee was still long when his dad died so A was taking care of him and he was a jinjuriki and most of the jinjuriki's that were born without parents had some kind of guardian. Hiruzen if the 3rd hokage and could have had anyone take care of naruto but you find a kid of a random s rank more likely to be treated better? do you even know what you are saying
are u fking retarded? narutos dad was one of the most dangerous people in naruto world and most hated, the mother was a jinjuriki,,,,,MC just had S rank parents...S rank, like sakumo...the hokage couldnt take care of naruto cause he was the fking jinjuriki...MC is not that high class,,,MC could've stayed with the kages family instead of being sent to orphanage. MC wasnt wanted by enemies. my god u watched naruto? idiot
Choice_Username:that's your problem right there, your low attention span, exactly naruto's parents were also important but also a orphan your just proving my point and you're stupid if you think he couldn't take care of him because he was a jinjuriki becuase killer bee was still long when his dad died so A was taking care of him and he was a jinjuriki and most of the jinjuriki's that were born without parents had some kind of guardian. Hiruzen if the 3rd hokage and could have had anyone take care of naruto but you find a kid of a random s rank more likely to be treated better? do you even know what you are saying
Ur problem is that u a retard that argues without knowing ****.
Choice_Username:that's your problem right there, your low attention span, exactly naruto's parents were also important but also a orphan your just proving my point and you're stupid if you think he couldn't take care of him because he was a jinjuriki becuase killer bee was still long when his dad died so A was taking care of him and he was a jinjuriki and most of the jinjuriki's that were born without parents had some kind of guardian. Hiruzen if the 3rd hokage and could have had anyone take care of naruto but you find a kid of a random s rank more likely to be treated better? do you even know what you are saying
you just repeated what i just said . the only thing you can say is retard as a insult, retards are expected to be stupid, you're parents were probably just extremely disappointed you turned out worse than one
amaturewriter:Ur problem is that u a retard that argues without knowing ****.
dude, whatever u said is all here.
Choice_Username:you just repeated what i just said . the only thing you can say is retard as a insult, retards are expected to be stupid, you're parents were probably just extremely disappointed you turned out worse than one
This is what fanfic got to be like not the other fanfic that stick in the original story like a shit
