This seems like a wish fulfillment FF...... -MC is orphaned isnt of being taken care by someone like the kage or their friends, and this is important cause MC is the child of 2 S rankers and in the early chps its shown MC mom was close with the kage,,,so yah, pretty stupid for MC to be left in the orphanage,,,plus its not like MC would be attacked or kidnapped. And everyone [ or atleast] many know who his parents are so yah. -MC choose a pretty stupid ability,,,basically he choose an ability to make all his earth jutsu bombs,,,whilst this seems OP, it isnt...its hard to control, isnt versatile and is kinda useless.. .he ignored deidara ability for this, deidara ability is kinda top 10 abilities in naruto...I mean its OP and versatile...plus this easily allows MC to make earth jutsu bombs so yah...MC choose stupid ability -This story follows the naruto talk no jutsu style....seeing as how MC wanted to build friendships for allies, kinda pointless......I hope u know that madara, hashirama, naruto, sasuke, orochi, pain, itachi, etc all disagree with that ****.....one man army all the way
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LIKELook at all the plot holes I mentioned, author can fix it and his **** would be DOPE, cause he has something unique here, but so much mistakes. And I am not ordering, its upto him, there are so many glossed over **** that I found in ONLY SIX chps....author should just fix his mistakes,,,,again what I said is just a suggestion [**: reading six chps dosnt mean what I say isnt valid]
TwistedUExile:Only got 6 chapter in don't listen to him
I din’t really give a **** about most plot holes nor wish fullfillment, but I can’t stand MC choosing a literal deadweight as his ability (if what you’re writing is true). I really hate when authors makes his mc an idiot, because no Naruto fan would ever take that as his ability. Haven’t read, won’t read, thanks for the review milf hater🙇♂️
I'm confused, the only plot hole you mentioned was the mc being raised in an orphanage and that was explained in the first few chapters
amaturewriter:Look at all the plot holes I mentioned, author can fix it and his **** would be DOPE, cause he has something unique here, but so much mistakes. And I am not ordering, its upto him, there are so many glossed over **** that I found in ONLY SIX chps....author should just fix his mistakes,,,,again what I said is just a suggestion [**: reading six chps dosnt mean what I say isnt valid]
i correc, not nasuverse but narutoverse. and why i will ? because many good naruto fanfict is droped. i think you have many idea or imagination. and i dont like if mc is naruto because it is klise.
amaturewriter:why would I make a nasuverse fanfic? also why would you want to know about my ideal ff?