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Daiost_Chan
Daiost_ChanLv44yr
2020-06-01 22:33

This is what you get when the story is rushed, trying to get from point A to B. The MC (Harry) is just rushing from ''plot'' to ''plot'' no real thought is place on the decision-making, its just done. So no real consequences either. Its not a terrible story but its not interesting in anyway whatsoever. And if you want a logical and intelligent take on a HP Fanfic look elsewhere. No world-building, no real characters and no reason for the MC to be around either.

Heir of Chaos.

Ryan_Colman
3.9
189 Chs

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GermanRoulette
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—"My autocorrect snaps it to Fluer so I just don’t change it." This quote from the writer sums up this complete mess of a story better than anything. There's absolutely nothing wrong with making a bad training story (and this is really, really bad), trying to get better at certain things; just don't share it with other people. What an absolute waste of time.

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Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

Poorly written (bad)wish fulfilment fanfic without any sense of realism or logic. It's more of a parody than anything. E.g mc becomes a lord of merlin, Gryffindor Slytherin blah blah blah...... very silly. Basically he should name himself a god of magic at this point. Plus all this happening while his 8 years old! And somehow talks with everyone like some mature ***** and nobody reacts to that. Moreover, typical silly friendly goblins for some reason and the way wizards talk is also unrealistic. E.g 'Oh my god' etc. Apparently some wizard managed to get shocked to unconsciousness from being surprised at mc titles. LOL. Overall it's a silly parody.

4yr
MrEox
MrEoxLv5

I read the first few chapters and simply couldn't stand it after that. WTF! It's the most ****tiest MC i have ever seen with a system. He's magically a heir to everything but never apply that power. (not interested in business an political power) He's a beta MC, everything happens in his favor without him wanting anything strongly. This MC has no motivation, goal or anything to make his character interesting. Let's not mention that the system barely make any apparence as anything other that the author's excuse to anything that happens in the story. MC needs stuff for rituals from extinct animals ?-->"don't bother, the system did it in the background " .need to explain how he gets a modern oven in the fifties? : "Shhh. Shut up, the system did it....🤐😤 In short, you should rework your story 'cause it's shitty .

4yr
DarthVegito
DarthVegitoLv10

Story was fine until for some reason the mc takes over Harry’s body and his fiancé bellatrix idk what happened since I dropped it... was dumb and a waste to read

4yr
koolsalad
koolsaladLv12

After reading for a while i can’t bring myself to continue, i feel like I’m losing brain cells reading this. The main character is just stupid and the story has no kind of challenge.

4yr
Allhavens
AllhavensLv11

Reveal spoiler

4yr
Hugo_Adam
Hugo_AdamLv4

This is one of the trashiest which fulfillment fanfics I have ever read, none of the characters have an actual personality with the exception of the mc who is actually Autor fulfilling his idiotic fantasies

4yr
Etiger789
Etiger789Lv15

Reveal spoiler

4yr
Spike009
Spike009Lv4

Well I’ll be honest his Harry Potter world is ok. But other worlds were good. The problem I have with this novel is his nerfing. One world he make MC strong as hell next he nerf him to literally a human to start again . You can say he loves to do it for story. I just say he lacks creativity. Well it’s just my opinion.

4yr
Melonpan
MelonpanLv4

It's a diary of how the author wished it happened rather than a story. There are even chapters where no one speaks and the progression is too fast and totally trash. He only says "We did this and that, now we are a happy family" instead of making it really happen. Wish Fulfillment diary ... The worst fanfic I read until now

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