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lightbringer_007
lightbringer_007Lv54yr
2020-07-24 17:52

Not gonna lie...I am really disappointed with the author...come on map 3 wishes...good team..but...still man I am out...this drop so low for me....that I don't wanna come and see..the training arc..which in my opinion is waste of time...u should skip to High school...bcoz in third year mc will lose again....so bye..all the best author....not my cup of tea...

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Jasonenrick
JasonenrickLv14

Writing Quality- 5-Stars Stability of Updates - 4-Stars Story Development 2-Star Character Design 1-Star World Backgound 2-Star Okay, so I Think the First two are self explaining so I won't explain my why I set 5-and 4-Stars! Story Development is good and was good but there is no Goal for me in the Novel and I don't get why this Novel exists! So he has 3 wishes , is reincarnated in his Favourite Novel and loses against the Mc's of the Story,....would makes Sense!But!But, what will he do now that he lost against them when they were at their weakest! He loses All the matches in the middle school against Teiko ! So he can never say" I Played against the GOM and won" No, he won't ever be able to do that! My dream would be to beat them in a fair and regular match if I were to reincarnate in my Favourite Novel, that would be everyones Dream! Won't be possible now,aye? Bascially there is nothing for the Mc to do in the Novel , for me atleast ! Maybe Romance but that's it ! The Character makes no Sense as well and he is kinda Stupid! He makes no OP wishes so that it won't be easy but a hard! But now what?? He loses and his whole Peropose for being in that World isn't there anymore ! Like I said before, Why do people love hard games...because it taste even better If you win against your enemy Team If they are good and not Bad! Well doesn't Matter anymore now ,aye? Well, I just end it here, I get really frustated writing this because my Auto correction is driving me insan😠😠😠🥴🥴😵😵 [ My Opinion ] I don't get why you write this ....there is no fun in it, no logic and the only way it can get worse If Riko Aida is going to be his girlfriend !

Denis_Barbosa
Denis_BarbosaLv1

I probably should put my thoughts on a single comment. 1. Shun team shouldn't be that weak considering that they won the previous championship and have a uncrowned king. So that against the undeveloped Generation of Miracles stomp in the third quarter shouldn't really happen. 2. In the manga, I think their first finals only have a point difference of 30 points but in the third quarter that 4 point lead for Shun's team suddenly became a 26 point difference against his team is a drastic change and a huge especially with the previous noted team. 3. Shun literal lost through a bouncing ball plot. Just what. It's wasn't a special awaken ability from any of the member s. It was just a lucky shot from the guy who's has one of the least amount of experience with a 3 pointer beside Kuroko. I would rather have him lose from non luck special ability awakening than a lucky plot shot. 4. Where's the development?! No special abilities that are unlock or really display of great feats. I thought there would be special awakenings. Like zone or emperor eye or the other abilities that the GOM have from pushing each other and pasting their limits or something but it seems to be just a regular game. 5. I think the comments already said this enough but losing against Teiko now means he can't win for the rest of middle school logically unless you have American team talent next year in Shun's team. This makes it a little infuriating considering the circumstance that is in the game and later down the plot. I know this is your fanfic and I don't know what you plan on doing but I don't think this is a good release.

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