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Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv54yr
2021-01-06 02:58

I'm not going to hold back at this one this story need a major rewrite and the fact that the mc doesn't have any redeeming aspect about him make it worst I tired my best to reach to pass 111 even though most of the shit what happen didn't need to you might think it would build character but all I see or broken people mc got a second chance and does nothing to change his self he's worst than beta mcs even if he kills a couple of people for his sis doesn't change the fact he could have gotten better character development the story has unnecessary drama what just kills it for most people to read anyway I hope you can reread the story you post and give it a better plot

Reincarnation of a Worthless Man

ForestDweller
4.0
274 Chs

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ForestDweller
ForestDwellerAuthor

I'm not going to write an entire half a million words just because of some random reviewer.

4yr
Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv5

fine i was just putting it out there your story was full of way too much drama for most readers

4yr
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Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv5

and I wasn't expecting you to just letting you know what I think

4yr
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ForestDweller
ForestDwellerAuthor

You're right. It is too much drama for most people. Not enough power fantasy for an isekai, right?

4yr
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Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv5

yup mc doesn't really try to do shit in the early part he was to immature for a guy who reincarnated

ForestDweller:You're right. It is too much drama for most people. Not enough power fantasy for an isekai, right?
4yr
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ForestDweller
ForestDwellerAuthor

See? You want a confident, fantasy power MC. Not an MC that's a worthless man. Not to mention that the first part of that sentence is objectively wrong.

Lordmoonlight:yup mc doesn't really try to do shit in the early part he was to immature for a guy who reincarnated
4yr
Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv5

won't bs you I wouldn't have confidence if I was re but the mc doesn't really try to change the fact that you get a second change in life change ppl Ik that for fact but the mc doesn't change much i won't lie i was a worthless person didn't think i had much to do in life but when i was so close to death at one point I realized that I could do way much better than I was doing it sparked a change in me what I'm grateful for it but seeing a mc who died but doesn't really change that much is really hard to stand even when I read the recent chapter I see that he change a lil but not much

ForestDweller:See? You want a confident, fantasy power MC. Not an MC that's a worthless man. Not to mention that the first part of that sentence is objectively wrong.
4yr
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Lordmoonlight
LordmoonlightLv5

sorry for the rant I just can see the mc doing much more in his second life

4yr
ForestDweller
ForestDwellerAuthor

I got ya. You want him to change to be a badass right away. Sorry bud. This ain't that kind of story.

Lordmoonlight:won't bs you I wouldn't have confidence if I was re but the mc doesn't really try to change the fact that you get a second change in life change ppl Ik that for fact but the mc doesn't change much i won't lie i was a worthless person didn't think i had much to do in life but when i was so close to death at one point I realized that I could do way much better than I was doing it sparked a change in me what I'm grateful for it but seeing a mc who died but doesn't really change that much is really hard to stand even when I read the recent chapter I see that he change a lil but not much
4yr
Lord_KronosxX
Lord_KronosxXLv3

Glad you stopped updating this garbage fire

ForestDweller:I got ya. You want him to change to be a badass right away. Sorry bud. This ain't that kind of story.
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I have read your story until ch 60 currently. I feel much depression on the mc, and it kinda stupid and bit retarded with how I think. . He meet many people and bit exaggerated around girl if not cute then big boob. . He knew what he lacking and think he can overcome it with his the so called soon to be wife, and forget his own siblings.

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Honest?, the novel had a lot of potential, but everything went to hêll in since *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* *SPOILERS* Since author decided it was a good idea to kill of MC parents and causing mc and his sisters to become wanted criminals... Thats ok, but what made me speechless was that author decided that the MC leave his sister and baby sister ALONE and they are also wanted criminals, while he went to another continent to search for the adopted girl... I was Like The F!?, at least bring your sisters with you!!. I kept reading for more chapters, but things got from bad to worse. Its not bad to add tragedy and what not, but what the author made the MC do is asking to smash his head in a wall.

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