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amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv44yr
2020-06-12 21:04

writing quality and other **** are all dope BUT MC is a beta,,,like this is an *****, that gets embarrassed by young girls,,,,yah its nasty. Then theres the fact that despite being an ***** in a kids body this dude aint special as ****,,,,,he is too weak.....dosnt make use of any SI modern world or anime knowledge to create spells, attacks or do anything...... then there are retarded moments where MC's sis get humiliated like getting stripped in public by some 15 yr old ***** but she does nothing but accept it cause of her pride...its retarded cause.. 1) she has pride, she shouldnt allow it, its ironic that she allows such humiliation if she has pride... 2) she is a super genius able to out rank 15 yr old, who is a noble. my ass she wouldn't get some special privileges... 3) where the **** are the teachers?, they are allowing a 11 yr old child to get bullied to such an extent, even worse considering said child is a super genius. There are many retarded moments like this that made me drop. BUT if u like a decent story with retarded moments and a beta MC...this is for u

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ForestDweller
ForestDwellerAuthor

She can't really do anything about it since the bully is basically a princess. The teachers wouldn't go against her since her gramps is a really important person there. And he would use his modern knowledge to create a spell later.

amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

listen, if she was an ordinary genius I would be fine, but here she is shown to be a super genius, ...so yah.............plus as I said before, some teacher wouldnt allow that much ****, no matter how influential th person, especially if the school s very prestigious...there would be powerful teacher, also, it would be pretty retarded if the school was controlled by the monarchy, cause if so, there would be no purpose for school.........dont make excuses author dude,,,no offense but ur story has retarded moments,,,,retarded, not stupid [atleast in my opinion ]

ForestDweller:She can't really do anything about it since the bully is basically a princess. The teachers wouldn't go against her since her gramps is a really important person there. And he would use his modern knowledge to create a spell later.
ShaadyJ
ShaadyJLv13

If you read further, you’d realize the teachers are nowhere near as powerful as you think they are and the whole Magocracy is controlled by the council of mages. The school doesn’t have any Grandmaster mages so as a granddaughter of a Grandmaster mage, the teachers would be too scared to do anything. Just by looking at the name, “Magocracy,” it’s quite obvious that the country is ruled by mages and the mages who hold the most power would “probably” be able to do whatever the **** they want. Yeah I should probably stop responding to these kind of reviews...

amaturewriter:listen, if she was an ordinary genius I would be fine, but here she is shown to be a super genius, ...so yah.............plus as I said before, some teacher wouldnt allow that much ****, no matter how influential th person, especially if the school s very prestigious...there would be powerful teacher, also, it would be pretty retarded if the school was controlled by the monarchy, cause if so, there would be no purpose for school.........dont make excuses author dude,,,no offense but ur story has retarded moments,,,,retarded, not stupid [atleast in my opinion ]
ShaadyJ
ShaadyJLv13

Forgot to mention that in a Magocracy, it’s seems that people there respect power, not potential as a genius is only a genius if they can stay alive, so the ones who already have power have more sway than someone with no background but has potential. Basically, power = influence as it does in our world.

amaturewriter:listen, if she was an ordinary genius I would be fine, but here she is shown to be a super genius, ...so yah.............plus as I said before, some teacher wouldnt allow that much ****, no matter how influential th person, especially if the school s very prestigious...there would be powerful teacher, also, it would be pretty retarded if the school was controlled by the monarchy, cause if so, there would be no purpose for school.........dont make excuses author dude,,,no offense but ur story has retarded moments,,,,retarded, not stupid [atleast in my opinion ]
CliffkunLolRekt
CliffkunLolRektLv6

He ntrd the mc the latest chapters take this down to a 1 Star scum who ntr mcs deserve 0 stars but as that’s not possible 1 star

amaturewriter
amaturewriterLv4

if its like this then this kingdom is ****

ShaadyJ:If you read further, you’d realize the teachers are nowhere near as powerful as you think they are and the whole Magocracy is controlled by the council of mages. The school doesn’t have any Grandmaster mages so as a granddaughter of a Grandmaster mage, the teachers would be too scared to do anything. Just by looking at the name, “Magocracy,” it’s quite obvious that the country is ruled by mages and the mages who hold the most power would “probably” be able to do whatever the **** they want. Yeah I should probably stop responding to these kind of reviews...
ShaadyJ
ShaadyJLv13

You’re damn right

amaturewriter:if its like this then this kingdom is ****
ShaadyJ
ShaadyJLv13

He never got ntr’d buddy, idk what novel you’re reading.

CliffkunLolRekt:He ntrd the mc the latest chapters take this down to a 1 Star scum who ntr mcs deserve 0 stars but as that’s not possible 1 star
CliffkunLolRekt
CliffkunLolRektLv6

Dood she got druged almost completely broke groped and then the mcs parents died that ****ty grandmother is still living and so is that noble kid the mc is running away and will not continue to fight hence she will finish the job on the mcs sister His parents got decapitated also in the same fucking chapter and even if it’s not a full ntr witch I’m 99.9 percent shure it is 50 fucking chapters of harem blue ball only for this **** Yea I’m feeling violent yo author by any chance you live in California wanna duke it out in the ring I promise I won’t **** up your face too bad

ShaadyJ:He never got ntr’d buddy, idk what novel you’re reading.
ShaadyJ
ShaadyJLv13

First of all, the grandmother is DEAD, she got her head taken off by Mc and the kid got elbowed in the face the moment he touched her, and then the grandma also sent him away and chances are he’s gonna get tortured for a very long time by Marina’s friend once she finds him, so again, I don’t know what you’re reading there buddy.

CliffkunLolRekt:Dood she got druged almost completely broke groped and then the mcs parents died that ****ty grandmother is still living and so is that noble kid the mc is running away and will not continue to fight hence she will finish the job on the mcs sister His parents got decapitated also in the same fucking chapter and even if it’s not a full ntr witch I’m 99.9 percent shure it is 50 fucking chapters of harem blue ball only for this **** Yea I’m feeling violent yo author by any chance you live in California wanna duke it out in the ring I promise I won’t **** up your face too bad
ShaadyJ
ShaadyJLv13

Next time you should read a little slower so that you can actually know what’s going on...

CliffkunLolRekt:Dood she got druged almost completely broke groped and then the mcs parents died that ****ty grandmother is still living and so is that noble kid the mc is running away and will not continue to fight hence she will finish the job on the mcs sister His parents got decapitated also in the same fucking chapter and even if it’s not a full ntr witch I’m 99.9 percent shure it is 50 fucking chapters of harem blue ball only for this **** Yea I’m feeling violent yo author by any chance you live in California wanna duke it out in the ring I promise I won’t **** up your face too bad
CliffkunLolRekt
CliffkunLolRektLv6

What about his sister is she still frozen Sorry I already was on edge by the ntr vibes this novel was sending for 40 chapters and how the harem is basically blue ball torture And on top of that I had to work in the yard all day so yea ima be down right pissed if I was blue balled harem wise for 40 chapters while having minor ntr vibes like I feel like the author is going to pull something and then it almost completely happend I forced myself to read past the kidnapping part as I may be wrong As I had cultivating ah **** here we go again feelings from the ntr in cultivating novels how the flying **** can one read that calmly I’m sincerely suprised you could if you did Also author killed the fucking parents I liked them why douse almost every author have a hit on the mcs parents I tried not to like them but I failed and liked them now there dead As you can see I’m full of swirling emotions currently that are like a whirlpool

ShaadyJ:First of all, the grandmother is DEAD, she got her head taken off by Mc and the kid got elbowed in the face the moment he touched her, and then the grandma also sent him away and chances are he’s gonna get tortured for a very long time by Marina’s friend once she finds him, so again, I don’t know what you’re reading there buddy.
ShaadyJ
ShaadyJLv13

She’s not frozen anymore, she woke up a couple days later and I was only able to read it calmly because I didn’t think anything was going to happen. Although I didn’t expect to see what happened to his parents I wasn’t completely caught off guard. What’s happening right now with the Mc though is annoying me...

CliffkunLolRekt:What about his sister is she still frozen Sorry I already was on edge by the ntr vibes this novel was sending for 40 chapters and how the harem is basically blue ball torture And on top of that I had to work in the yard all day so yea ima be down right pissed if I was blue balled harem wise for 40 chapters while having minor ntr vibes like I feel like the author is going to pull something and then it almost completely happend I forced myself to read past the kidnapping part as I may be wrong As I had cultivating ah **** here we go again feelings from the ntr in cultivating novels how the flying **** can one read that calmly I’m sincerely suprised you could if you did Also author killed the fucking parents I liked them why douse almost every author have a hit on the mcs parents I tried not to like them but I failed and liked them now there dead As you can see I’m full of swirling emotions currently that are like a whirlpool
ShaadyJ
ShaadyJLv13

Lol, I already said in one of these comments I’m 17 and there’s no way I’d spend my time writing a story when I could be playing Warzone, (and yes, reading is different from writing, requires a lot more brainpower that I don’t feel like using during my break) and if you were actually reading some of my comments you’d see that some people had some misconceptions of what happened in story, such as this thread right here, the guy thought the sister was raped but she actually wasn’t, now think about what other people would’ve thought about the novel because someone said the MCs sister got raped even though it wasn’t true? People aren’t even trying to read the novel because others are calling the Mc a b**** right off the rip, I simply wanted these other people to give it a shot, *Spoiler* because would a beta kill tens of people just to save his sister, not to mention pit himself against one of the strongest people known to man when it could end up causing his death? But no one would know that because they didn’t read the story and even ones who “reviewed” it based it off of the 20 something chapters they had read. *Spoiler* Although he was being hella beta for running away, wasn’t what I had expected to happen tbh. Anyways, I have no problem with other people having an opinion, it’s just that while an opinion doesn’t need to be based off of facts, it surely helps to know wtf you’re talking about before you formulate one. I highly doubt IMDb watches the first three or four episodes of a new show before giving their final thoughts or rating. Btw there aren’t that many reviews here for the word “most” to even matter. I think I commented on 3-4, 4 being the maximum. 🤧

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KneeCapBandit
KneeCapBanditLv14

It’s called character development

CliffkunLolRekt:What about his sister is she still frozen Sorry I already was on edge by the ntr vibes this novel was sending for 40 chapters and how the harem is basically blue ball torture And on top of that I had to work in the yard all day so yea ima be down right pissed if I was blue balled harem wise for 40 chapters while having minor ntr vibes like I feel like the author is going to pull something and then it almost completely happend I forced myself to read past the kidnapping part as I may be wrong As I had cultivating ah **** here we go again feelings from the ntr in cultivating novels how the flying **** can one read that calmly I’m sincerely suprised you could if you did Also author killed the fucking parents I liked them why douse almost every author have a hit on the mcs parents I tried not to like them but I failed and liked them now there dead As you can see I’m full of swirling emotions currently that are like a whirlpool
KneeCapBandit
KneeCapBanditLv14

Considering the vibes the author was giving to his characters earlier in the story and the fact that this is based on MT AND the description of the novel, I wasn’t even that surprised, I mean, did you see what he did to the bully lmao

ShaadyJ:She’s not frozen anymore, she woke up a couple days later and I was only able to read it calmly because I didn’t think anything was going to happen. Although I didn’t expect to see what happened to his parents I wasn’t completely caught off guard. What’s happening right now with the Mc though is annoying me...
CliffkunLolRekt
CliffkunLolRektLv6

Nay sir good character development is not about a character you care about like the mcs parents

KneeCapBandit:It’s called character development
CliffkunLolRekt
CliffkunLolRektLv6

You kill off the side characters that you only have a little feelings for that’s good character development Like that trio of kids that died that the mc only knew for 3 chapters

KneeCapBandit:It’s called character development
KneeCapBandit
KneeCapBanditLv14

It helped further in the story where he *spoiler* tried to heal a guys daughter but wasn’t able to succeed. The priest helped him learn that death is natural and it helped him through all three of those incidents (including the death of his parent) if you don’t see character development I’d call you blind

CliffkunLolRekt:You kill off the side characters that you only have a little feelings for that’s good character development Like that trio of kids that died that the mc only knew for 3 chapters
KneeCapBandit
KneeCapBanditLv14

Also, I’d say that any good story should have tragedy and heartbreak, there are many tc shows and stories that kill off their characters for the plot. Of course if you only want op never struggling born with a silver spoon I guess this novel might not be for you

CliffkunLolRekt:You kill off the side characters that you only have a little feelings for that’s good character development Like that trio of kids that died that the mc only knew for 3 chapters
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