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Tartarus
TartarusLv114yr
2020-04-10 02:06

Writing quality,the grammar are good. Updating stability are good too. Story development are very interesting. Character are funny and cute. World background are nice. This novel is good. All is good except the 'I' or 'me' got changed to 'You'. I can still read it but it is really bothering me. Especialy even if you try to read it as 'You' and try to immerse to the story but failed it badly. Please change it if you can so the reading can be more enjoy able

Along a Fading Path (Naruto)

Leekz01
4.5
34 Chs

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Leekz01
Leekz01Author

Actually the story started out in second person and I have been slowly editing each chapters when I have the time. The only chapter I haven't finished editing is chapter 6 year 6.

4yr
Tartarus
TartarusLv11

There are also the newest chapter or those before that. That you start with 'I' and 'me' and suddenly come back to 'You'

Leekz01:Actually the story started out in second person and I have been slowly editing each chapters when I have the time. The only chapter I haven't finished editing is chapter 6 year 6.
4yr
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