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2022-06-18 21:45

This story was amazing and for the first half was totally immersive. Unfortunately the quality of the proof reading/editing declined in the second half, with many typos that started to make sections difficult to read. That being said, it was still totally worth reading and incredibly enjoyable. The type of story that would make for a spectacular drama adaptation.

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