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PhoneAddiction
PhoneAddictionLv45yr
2020-05-04 13:57

The development of the characters and the storyline are very good, and I like where the story is heading. I think the characters have been fleshed out well and have reasonable behavior/interactions with other characters based on their set characteristics. There are some typos, such as wrong tense of words or using a homophone (wearily/weary when it’s supposed to be warily/wary) that do not disturb my understanding of the story but are a little distracting (I tend to nitpick grammar and such, sorry). Overall, this is a story I enjoyed reading and I will continue to follow because I look forward to seeing where this goes!

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