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Raine
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2021-10-18 16:30

I really liked the story tbh. The characters, the plot and the world building was great. A bit rushed at the end though and I would have liked some extras, just to know the HEA mudane things. A bit of domestic fluff is never a miss! A few things like clarification on Anyue/Sumeng relationship(I did not like the vague 'Perhaps' either), feelings and such after the talk about Xuelan's knowledge of the past life (some of their deep conversations just feel like they are missing parts or seem like lack of communication), some clear cut closures I guess. Many things were just too vague when it came to their relationship. But then again I think the mystery plot made up for it. I did like the fun and teasing conversations between Sumeng and Xuelan. They really had a fun yet deep relationship. This story do have great potential though, a sure read if you like a mystery romance!

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