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2022-02-01 21:06

Fairly juvenile writing. I think this author has a good foundation/idea for a story, but the delivery and tone is lacking. I hope this member can review their work and possibly revise it.

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I will give you my own version of pros and cons. You could check it yourself whether you are okay with the story or not. Don’t throw a rant if it is not your cup of tea, and everyone has their own preferences (You might hate a particular scene and remember that others might not). I will start with the cons first and save for the best. Cons: 1.Harem (I know that some might prefer this, and some might not. I will warn you here first if you haven’t checked the tag.) 2.MC might be dragged away by others at first. But he will slowly change as the story progresses and revolves around him. 3.Fewer releases. I am focusing on my main novel, but I will try to do a daily update. 4. I do research the materials before writing it. But it might still not be right, so feel free to tell me If I make it wrong. 5. Just saying, there might be some change in the story as the story goes on. I tried to outline how the story will go. But as the story progresses, I will certainly find that some of my original plots are not usable anymore and need to make new plots. So, there might be some points in this review that might be unusable anymore. Pros: 1. In the modern world, it might give you a better image to imagine the scene. 2. I love writing universal names. If you read the early chapter, you will find many names from other countries. I love making those names instead of naming all the people with one country’s style or a neutral name. (Not insulting others here, so peace.) 3. Powerful MC (?) with some hidden powers that will be revealed from time to time. The same applies to the world itself. 4. Harem (As I said before, it might become pros or cons according to own preferences.) 5. Not going to be a long story, but yeah, considering the length, it is certainly not a short one either. From my prediction, it is around 400 chapters. Might be lower or higher. Additional Info: 1. Chapter length: 1600-1800 words, might be longer. 2. Not a Native English speaker, so my English might burn you. I am trying to improve too, and if you find any mistakes, do tell me so I could fix it. 3. I am open to discussion, so feel free to tell me if I make mistakes or something. You can reply to ‘my’ chapter comments or this review as it is easier to find and read it. 4. It is a fantasy. Some of your logic might not be working in this world. Anyway, I won’t make it longer than this and keep you busy reading this review. If you like the story, please SMASH that vote button and considers adding this story to your collection.

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