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hassekf
hassekfLv54yr
2020-09-21 02:22

Interesting, good background and has lots of potential, but the author is still in his infancy when it comes to writing. Info dump everywhere, description of important events are ignored, characters are the most fake I have ever seen. Forced bullying, forced situations, no credibility at all. The Mc is dumb, ignorant of his own powers and is a suckrr for girls. Even the good old cliches are badly done here. The grammar and English of this, is almost umbereable. Needs some seeeerious editing to become readable. But again, is has potential, but the author seems to never have read a good written novel before. Maybe in the hands of a different writer, this can be a good gem. At last, good luck author. Hope you become a hellaof writer and comes back to redo this one. Good luck.

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Fhrutz_D_Hollow
Fhrutz_D_HollowAuthor

This review is funny!!!

Jimar_Jemar
Jimar_JemarLv4

agree

Jimar_Jemar
Jimar_JemarLv4

it's the truth though

Fhrutz_D_Hollow:This review is funny!!!
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Mashiva
MashivaLv13

Can't take an honest criticism about your work, huh? Well, let me just point out that your writing skills is funny. 🤣

Fhrutz_D_Hollow:This review is funny!!!
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Fhrutz_D_Hollow
Fhrutz_D_HollowAuthor

FYI I already deleted it long ago ‘if’ I couldn’t take criticism. It’s natural that my writing stYle is funny because it’s a slight comedy novel. HAHAHA. You’re funny as well. See I made you laugh.

Mashiva:Can't take an honest criticism about your work, huh? Well, let me just point out that your writing skills is funny. 🤣
CharonCR
CharonCRLv12

If you don't mind, how old are you?

Fhrutz_D_Hollow:FYI I already deleted it long ago ‘if’ I couldn’t take criticism. It’s natural that my writing stYle is funny because it’s a slight comedy novel. HAHAHA. You’re funny as well. See I made you laugh.
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ExodusGaming555
ExodusGaming555Lv6

my review for this novel(im not a hater, contains mild spoiler, I've read till chp 16) caution: read this novel if you doesn't care for faulty power/combat/levelling system and quite brain dead mc the story starts with how apparently weak the mc was. due to reason i'll not say, he arrived last at the school when they are giving free skills for first timer, making mc only get the last skill left that is self healing. nothing is wrong right? it was said that people can train to get attribute points and skills. with self healing, the amount of time mc could train the body is many times longer and receive benefit faster than other people, yet he never does this. mc is actually quite a clever kid, he managed to create an arrow almost as good as a b rank wood arrow by using a c rank wood (cost much lesser than b rank wood) + slime urine which is practically free. he also manage fool the guard by selling the c rank arrow at the price of higher than a b rank arrow. oh so you readers may wonder why do i said the mc is brain dead and the system in this novel is busted right? now here is the problem, the first chapter is showing how mc, a lv0 human fights a lv1 frog monster. you would see nothing is wrong here right? casual fighting monster 1 lv higher than you right? well, all is well until you see mc damages is only 1dmg when the frog deals like 30 dmg from normal attacks. the reasoning why his dmg is so low from the novels is that mc have no attacking skills (mc have benn whining how he have no attacking skill for all those 16 chp). but wait, you would think that stats influence the effect of normal attacks and skills. if an attack skill let you increase damage by 10%, with mc damage(that is 1 dmg), he could only dish out 1,1 damage which is way worse than his self healing which can heal his health for quite a good chunk. so the way i see it, he gaining self healing is way better than having attack skills. but than i notice something, you use magic skill by draining stamina? like wtf!! in the novel mc doesn't even have mana. if so, how the f other people gain mana then? its not like there is no poor people other then mc right? is gaining a magic skill unlocks mana? that can't be because he already have magic skills. why don't mc change his skill to a physical one then? he could always barter with other people for an attacking skill outside the school. honestly, the author is making level gap a big of a chasm. a lv1 monster can deal lots of damage against a lv 0 human is honestly mind boggling. its not like a monster gain 3-5x the amount of stats human gain when leveling up. if his damage is already so low, wouldn't it be better for mc to just chuck rocks from a safe distances using hands or slingshot, at least it reduces his chances of receiving dmg. besides how the hell mc as clever as he was never tried to team up with anyone else? even if he have low dps, he could be a tanker because his self healing. if his class is his enemies, he could go to other class to team up right? its not like everyone is an evil bullying bastards. he could also report to the teacher that he was close to for all his bullying which he never do. you could argue that mc is a loner/introvert but even i as a loner/introvert could report and ask help from others. he also have a very sick sister, which he very desperate to cure. so there is no excuse at all for him not to team up with others. his attitude for not seeking any help in all that condition is honestly just sheer arrogance and brain dead in my eyes.

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